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    dots Submission Name: Pink And Silver Wingsdots
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    Author: mysweetsuicide
    ASL Info:    14
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 59/86/28
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 426
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 679



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       Its about the sadness of growing up Tell me if you like it
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    caroline


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    dotsPink And Silver Wingsdots
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    Fly. Child. Fly.
    Stretch those wings of pink and silver to the sky
    Because soon they will disapper.
    Just fly child. Fly.

    Dance child, dance,
    Twirl like a ballerina, in your joyful trance,
    Because soon you’ll be ashamed to,
    Just dance, child, dance.

    Smile, child, smile,
    Giggle at anything half worthwhile,
    Because soon there will be less,
    Just smile, child, smile.


    Child, please, don’t grow up to soon,
    Just keep singing to your happy tune,
    Because soon, it will end.
    Be happy child
    Just, Be happy to be a child.





    Submitted on 2006-01-27 17:08:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was amazing. other than a minor spelling error, the only thing I can say is that it was much too short, I want more. The scope of the poem is wonderful, and I think it appeals to the child in all of us. I may just be reading too far into it, but I love it. FAVORITED.
    -Brian
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really wonderful! One glitch in the first line of the last stanza, 'to' = 'too'. Other than that little bit, I think this is flawless. I really adore it. It is going in my faves.
    -HaldirLives
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by HaldirLives | [ Reply to This ]
      When I started reading this I never would have thouhgt that it would be so beautiful ! When you're a child all you want to is to grow up and when you're grown up you realise how great being a child is. When my dad left I forgot how great being a child could be ...
    I really like it !
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Tom110989 | [ Reply to This ]
      This nearly brought a tear to my eye because of the true and sincerity in this. I can relate so much because with my mom's health problems I was forced to grow up faster than I should have...helping her and doing chores since I was really young...I lost my child-hood innocence very young, and reality just came upon me and smothered me...it really sucked and I can't find anythinig else to describe it but that. This is definately a favorite and I'll look back on this when I'm feeling down. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Jesus now this was really really good! I love this poem! Its brilliant! I like the title too! Keep writin stuff lik this and i'll keep reading it!
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by RichieHM | [ Reply to This ]



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