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    dots Submission Name: The Mirrordots
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    Author: akaietowa-ru_18
    ASL Info:    20/F/Belly of the Beast
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 101/125/64
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 940
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       I'm moving, and well I feel like a hopeless cause. I'm going to a a private school were I know I'm going to feel alone, unwanted. What's the point of being strong for others when you can't even feel strong for yourself. I can't get rid of the fear and pain inside....


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    dotsThe Mirrordots
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    If I'm old enough to choose
    then why am I kept out of the loop?
    Decisions made without me,
    not a word is spoken until the last minute.

    I feel lost sometimes,
    maybe even empty.
    I'm leaving a place I love
    a place I know.
    A majestic little coven for my sanity.

    I stare into the mirror,
    and only see a small frail girl.
    I'm scared,
    I know this.
    Cause that's how the little girl looks like.

    I don't see the developed woman,
    but a small girl with fear in her eyes;
    brown and shining with tears.

    She's holding onto a piece of black fabric.
    A small black box next to her.
    A small bear in her other hand.
    Tears are swelling,
    I hear her heartbeat grow faster.

    The mirror shows me...
    everything I don't want to believe.

    This isn't a fairytale...
    then why does it not feel real?
    Why are the heartbeats coming in so clearly?
    Why are those brown eyes mocking me?
    Why do I feel the same tears at night?
    Some one tell me why.....




    Submitted on 2006-01-27 17:57:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is moving on many levels.

    I feel for the girl and the woman. This portrays the visions quite clearly.

    I also believe there is a lot of hope for anyone with the ability to look at their self and be honest about what they feel. There is real power in being able to acknowledge and accept our fears.

    Good job!

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this, mainly for what Dave already said, you ain't whinin' just asking why???

    Poetry aside, what can my very echoey voice of experience tell you? That if everyone had stayed where it felt safe and good we'd all still be living in England (bugger, it would be crowded!)

    If you can't change the future, then embrace it. I'm not saying it's easy, or that it will be great, but if you have a positive mind set, it's quite incredible how positive things seem to happen, and, of course, the opposite if you are negative.

    Roll with it, go with the flow, and ride the best wave of the day.

    good luck

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I like this, the fear of the unknown is always hard but you have to believe that you will make new friends and you will settle into your new school. I know it's hard to leave behind the friends you have had for years but if you look on the bright side you WILL make even more friends.

    If I'm old enough to choose
    then why am I kept out of the loop?

    This line just caught me, as I know exatly how you feel, I am 22 old enough to make my own decisions but I feel like everyone else is making the decision and not telling me just expecting me to follow. My only advise is to hang in there and show them you are old enough to have your input and for it to be valuable.

    Talk to someone, tell them how you feel they are bound to listen
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwwww...she needs a hug!
    (((((((((((((((((her)))))))))))))))))))

    This was such a powerful write and not an ounce of "whiny"ness to it, just that damned awful sense of confusion. Written berry, berry well. You are correct, life isnt a fairytale, but sometimes it feels like one in a scary way and sometimes it feels like one in a good way.

    Too often we feel and/or let our children feel they are more grown up than what they truly are. Good luck and thanks for sharing this spectacular write!
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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