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    dots Submission Name: Confusiondots
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    Author: babytinkerbelle
    ASL Info:    26/f/aus
    Elite Ratio:    5.25 - 310/209/42
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 956
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 479



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       Just something I wrote at work describing the mixed emotions I have when I am near my ex. I think I am completely screwed up but who isn't so tell me what you think


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    dotsConfusiondots
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    Not knowing why
    I was attracted to you
    Yet being next to you
    I see why I loved you
    Feeling your touch
    Makes my skin crawl
    Yet hearing your voice
    Makes my heart soar
    I can smell your aftershave
    I want to be sick
    Yet looking into your eyes
    I could get lost forever
    Hearing your laugh
    Is like fingernails
    on a blackboard
    Yet seeing your smile
    Warms me through




    Submitted on 2006-01-27 18:46:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tink
    This write is oh so true
    When we look into the eyes of our soulmate we see love but we also realize life throws many curves that try to interfere in true love
    It seems to me you are smart enought to realize these curves cannot destroy what was meant to be
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe you just love him as a friend but the thought of being really intimate with him disgusts you. Who knows? The poem was rather interesteing anyways!

    IK
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Baby,

    I smiled all the way through this! Isn't it the truth how we can love and hate a person at the same time. Hopefully the love part wins out but not always.

    This was so well done - My professional opinion is that you are quiite normal. Sorry!

    Nice write

    Steve
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]


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