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Confusion


Author: babytinkerbelle
ASL Info:    26/f/aus
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Just something I wrote at work describing the mixed emotions I have when I am near my ex. I think I am completely screwed up but who isn't so tell me what you think


Confusion



Not knowing why
I was attracted to you
Yet being next to you
I see why I loved you
Feeling your touch
Makes my skin crawl
Yet hearing your voice
Makes my heart soar
I can smell your aftershave
I want to be sick
Yet looking into your eyes
I could get lost forever
Hearing your laugh
Is like fingernails
on a blackboard
Yet seeing your smile
Warms me through




Submitted on 2006-01-27 18:46:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Tink
This write is oh so true
When we look into the eyes of our soulmate we see love but we also realize life throws many curves that try to interfere in true love
It seems to me you are smart enought to realize these curves cannot destroy what was meant to be
God Bless
Your Friend
Ron
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Maybe you just love him as a friend but the thought of being really intimate with him disgusts you. Who knows? The poem was rather interesteing anyways!

IK
| Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey Baby,

I smiled all the way through this! Isn't it the truth how we can love and hate a person at the same time. Hopefully the love part wins out but not always.

This was so well done - My professional opinion is that you are quiite normal. Sorry!

Nice write

Steve
| Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]


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