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    dots Submission Name: You Justdots
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    Author: MansCreation
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Antioch, IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 2/4/8
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 638
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    dotsYou Justdots
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    I warn you to scare you away
    And you just crawl back to me
    I tell you to go away
    And my words just run on
    I push you away
    And you just pull me closer
    I canít get away
    And you just wont give up on me

    Why did you care?
    Just to pretend?
    If I open my arms
    Will I just get hurt again?

    I canít stand the dark
    With the feelings I donít have
    Now that your so far away from me
    And once again

    I warn you to scare you away
    And you just crawl back to me
    I tell you to go away
    And my words just run on
    I push you away
    And you just pull me closer
    I canít get away
    And you just wont give up on me

    So many times
    Iíve tried to run
    Only to hit these walls youíve made

    Built up around me
    Blocking me in
    I hear myself scream over and over again

    Why did you care?
    Just to pretend?
    If I open my arms
    Will I just get hurt again?


    Why did you care?
    Just to pretend?
    If I open my arms
    Will I just get hurt again




    Submitted on 2006-01-27 21:31:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this is an interesting, but differant i'm not really a big fan of this compared so quickly does this make any sense at all. random question did someone just dump you that you would getr so depressed listen to me, pour all that anger and depression into something. i've struggled with depression that was very severe believe me.
    ~Tabbie Kat
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Tabbie Kat | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I hate those little contradicting feelings that get under your skin so easily. These sound like lyrics, too, just to let you know. I can actually hear music behind this. You rhyming was right on key. Better than mine sometimes, check out my poem Nothing Left To Lose if you want, see if you like it. Anyway, one of the better ones I've read tonight, great job.
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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