Description: For all you who love. Tell them. They might be gone soon.
A gust of wind blew, as if to chase after the bus.
And he remembered...
The look of a boy, listening to the final words of a girl.
Boundless pride in his eyes.
The look... of one who loved.
And he knew....
The messenger who left white flowers.
And let a girl dream.
D@mn, that hit me hard. my girlfriend couldn't take all the [censored] her parents were putting her through, so she slit her wrists. down and across. a bloody cross. Damn, what i would give to tell her one last time that i love her
f***... it hurts, but keep it comming. The only way to ease the pain is to take all you can and make yourself go numb...
The overuse of ellipses was a bit distracting. If the poem was spaced differently in stanzas, it would help ease the reading.
"And he remembered... The look of a boy, listening to the final words of a girl."
I would go with:
He remembered the look of a boy, listening to the final words of a girl.
I did not understand the simile about the bus. It's a detail that does not tie in at the end of the poem. You wrote about a messenger leaving white flowers, so maybe a metaphor or simile relating to messengers instead of a bus would be more effective.
I really like this. I could paint a picture just with the little bit of description you gave. I can't find anything wrong with it. I like the way attention is drawn to the girl at the end, it makes it seem more contemplative(I don't think that's the word I'm looking for). Great job! -HaldirLives