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Leave me BE!!

Author: anooplokur
ASL Info:    21/male/india
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haha well this one i wrote in like 10 mins while i was sittin out waitin for my fren to finish his tut...let me know wat u think..

Leave me BE!!

Can you stick with me even if i whine
will you hold my hand and say you're MINE
can i trust you or will you leave me too??
Do i need lots of Money n a car to Woo?

Am i a LOSER? So dont you use me
Dont say you love me and confuse me
I cant give you what you want but what you need,
but that need will lead you to GREED

Dont! just go before its too late
leave ME...Leave me...Leave me BE!!
I'm a Loner still on her
So leave me...leave me...leave me BE!!
Let me DIE in my arms

Submitted on 2006-01-28 04:43:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  kkk i am confused i get the feeling it is about love and loss but i really am confused.
| Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]
  No this is just awesome.
I refuse to say anything more.
| Posted on 2006-11-12 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, that was different, yet good. Your style is different. I loved the power behind the poem, and the strength, but I also felt the sadness and loneliness. Good Write!
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
  SOOOO TRUE!!! Man, it's so true about my life... And actually, as far as I've seen, you DO need lots of money and a car to woo!!! You just put into words what me and my friend are lonely for... you are GREAT! I'm definitely adding this to my favs! This is my 1st favourite!!!
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]
  wow this made my eyes go wide. i admire this poem it sounds so much like me. you feel you have to own something fancy to when the girl's heart. The part that I was pleased with was that you said "I can give you want you want, not what you need" most people think only about the finer things in life.

Not looking at the big picture. God has so genrously painted for them. He has burned the portrait for he has lost all hope in our ignorance and greed. Clothes do make the man but only to extent
| Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Solitary Blue | [ Reply to This ]

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