Description: It's hard not giving up when everything goes wrong. It's been five years ago when it all went wrong for me. There were times when I felt like giving up, but I'm still here. Sometimes I just refused to give and most of the times someone kinda saved me from giving up. Those are the people I'll always remember.
Anyway, I hope you like it.
Never give up -------------------------------------------
Never give up …
Keep on hoping …
And eventually you will reach your goal …
It’s been almost five years
When I first thought of those words
When hope was fading away
And everything went dark
The only thing I could see
Was a small light at the end
Of a long dark road
Five years …
And that small light
Seems smaller than ever before
The time when it was big and bright is gone
And I fear it won’t return
I can’t make it come back
And you …
You don’t seem to care …
You just stand there
Watching me fail
Time after time
Doing nothing
I beg of you
Raise out your hand
And pull me into the light
I want to be happy again
Give me a reason to be
So I can leave the darkness behind me
And escape this nightmare once and forever
This is a really deep write I congratulate you on surviving the dark time in your life I too went thru a very dark time for five years I find it amazing that I am still here Stay Positive and continue to fight the negative Your clear and positive outlook now will carry you God Bless Ron
Tom! new, post good job. not happy but hey-still good. first off i'm so sorry that your life seems so depressing and i hope that you start to feel better very soon. i have one critique though-(sorry, its the writter in me- i gotta comment on everything) i think that in line 24, you might want to change "raise" to 'reach'. raise usually means "up" whereas "reach' can go with 'out'. just a picky suggestion. other than that, it summs up the feeling of sadness and need well. good job. i gotta go but i'll send you something soon! SASHA LYNN
wow very powerful indeed but yea there is somthing missing in this great peice. my fav lines are "And i fear it wont return" "I cant make it come back" good well being at this part. I look forward to reading more of yours. : )
I agree with Timmy that this is drenching in emotion. It brings out very sad thoughts, longing, and wanting. I can't relate, yet, but it's just so powerful, i think.
Submission Name: Never give up
