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Never give up

Author: Tom110989
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Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Longing
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It's hard not giving up when everything goes wrong. It's been five years ago when it all went wrong for me. There were times when I felt like giving up, but I'm still here. Sometimes I just refused to give and most of the times someone kinda saved me from giving up. Those are the people I'll always remember.
Anyway, I hope you like it.

Never give up

Never give up …
Keep on hoping …
And eventually you will reach your goal …
It’s been almost five years
When I first thought of those words
When hope was fading away
And everything went dark
The only thing I could see
Was a small light at the end
Of a long dark road
Five years …
And that small light
Seems smaller than ever before
The time when it was big and bright is gone
And I fear it won’t return
I can’t make it come back
And you …
You don’t seem to care …
You just stand there
Watching me fail
Time after time
Doing nothing
I beg of you
Raise out your hand
And pull me into the light
I want to be happy again
Give me a reason to be
So I can leave the darkness behind me
And escape this nightmare once and forever

Submitted on 2006-01-28 08:34:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a really deep write
I congratulate you on surviving the dark time in your life
I too went thru a very dark time for five years
I find it amazing that I am still here
Stay Positive and continue to fight the negative
Your clear and positive outlook now will carry you
God Bless
| Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
new, post good job. not happy but hey-still good. first off i'm so sorry that your life seems so depressing and i hope that you start to feel better very soon. i have one critique though-(sorry, its the writter in me- i gotta comment on everything) i think that in line 24, you might want to change "raise" to 'reach'. raise usually means "up" whereas "reach' can go with 'out'. just a picky suggestion. other than that, it summs up the feeling of sadness and need well. good job. i gotta go but i'll send you something soon!
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Sasha Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
  wow very powerful indeed but yea there is somthing missing in this great peice. my fav lines are "And i fear it wont return" "I cant make it come back" good well being at this part. I look forward to reading more of yours.
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| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by red passion | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with Timmy that this is drenching in emotion. It brings out very sad thoughts, longing, and wanting. I can't relate, yet, but it's just so powerful, i think.
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]
  awww this piece is drenching in emotional want i feel possibly for a lost love i am not sure yet it definately welled emotions up inside of me

Timmy S. Edgar
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]

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