Never give up
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It's hard not giving up when everything goes wrong. It's been five years ago when it all went wrong for me. There were times when I felt like giving up, but I'm still here. Sometimes I just refused to give and most of the times someone kinda saved me from giving up. Those are the people I'll always remember.
Anyway, I hope you like it.
Anyway, I hope you like it.
Never give up
Never give up … Keep on hoping … And eventually you will reach your goal … It’s been almost five years When I first thought of those words When hope was fading away And everything went dark The only thing I could see Was a small light at the end Of a long dark road Five years … And that small light Seems smaller than ever before The time when it was big and bright is gone And I fear it won’t return I can’t make it come back And you … You don’t seem to care … You just stand there Watching me fail Time after time Doing nothing I beg of you Raise out your hand And pull me into the light I want to be happy again Give me a reason to be So I can leave the darkness behind me And escape this nightmare once and forever |
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| This is a really deep write I congratulate you on surviving the dark time in your life I too went thru a very dark time for five years I find it amazing that I am still here Stay Positive and continue to fight the negative Your clear and positive outlook now will carry you God Bless Ron | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] | Tom! | new, post good job. not happy but hey-still good. first off i'm so sorry that your life seems so depressing and i hope that you start to feel better very soon. i have one critique though-(sorry, its the writter in me- i gotta comment on everything) i think that in line 24, you might want to change "raise" to 'reach'. raise usually means "up" whereas "reach' can go with 'out'. just a picky suggestion. other than that, it summs up the feeling of sadness and need well. good job. i gotta go but i'll send you something soon! SASHA LYNN | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Sasha Lynn | [ Reply to This ] | wow very powerful indeed but yea there is somthing missing in this great peice. my fav lines are "And i fear it wont return" "I cant make it come back" good well being at this part. I look forward to reading more of yours. | : ) | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by red passion | [ Reply to This ] | I agree with Timmy that this is drenching in emotion. It brings out very sad thoughts, longing, and wanting. I can't relate, yet, but it's just so powerful, i think. | | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ] | awww this piece is drenching in emotional want i feel possibly for a lost love i am not sure yet it definately welled emotions up inside of me | Timmy S. Edgar | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ] | |
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