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the heavens laugh


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 145
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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if you want god to laugh, make plans.


the heavens laugh



while the year is still new,
I compose a list of things to do
unaware that heaven laughs.
my vows, my plege to
loose, to save, be more
and say less,
go to and avoid.
its a long list.
not unlike many written around the world.
To break some habits and
make new ones.
To bend from my waste
when saying thanks.
feng shui the rooms
that fill my soul
to make less plans,
but have more control.
To let go last
while in an embrace.
to laugh out loud, and
the birds I'll chase.
This year, when i know
he is watching, i will
swing my hips
and walk away.
with faith that he will follow.
And if not, I will
read my list
and wonder about the laughter
from up above.






Submitted on 2006-01-28 11:41:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well thought out, structured and it told a story and gave a clear message. Could not fault it at all.

Well done - Frank.
| Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  To break some habits and
make new ones.

This was my favorite line in this poem, it says something about this society and it's just so, so true. I liked the part where you're kinda like saying "forget-you-if-you-forget-me" to this guy. I love that kinda attitude, it's perfect. It made me laugh, and that's a very rare and wonderful thing, lol. Thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  my favorite line is this:

To let go last
while in an embrace

We can make our plans but it is God who directs our paths. And some of our plans has to be funny to Him.a unique piece.good work!
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow. Nice take on Psalm 1. It's wonderful. Yeah, God will laugh if you try to make plans without taking Him into consideration. This one made me laugh too. Great Write!
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
  okay, i like the text its self but i dont like the way its written with all the short lines and i dont know if you're trying to make it rhyme?
and the rhyme may be kind of twisted.
but i like the poem its self and what it is behind it.
it was actually, nicely written.

-BleedingTears
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
  This is wonderful. I love it. The grammar on some of the lines are strange, but that's what poetry is for I guess. Perfect new years poem, and I love it. Again. More than once. Write more because elite skills needs more poetry that's less emotional and more classy. FAVORITED.
-Brian
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]


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