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    Author: Lil Sis Rose
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/2/1
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 360
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I would just like to know if you think it's good or bad. It's about a guy who plays with a girl's feelings, knowing she's in love with him, leading her on and taking advantage of her. I don't know if I was venting or not, but my emotional state was 'utterly hurt'.


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    A beautiful heart, unstoppable soul,
    she'd give him the world, he's her secret untold.
    Cherished words never to be heard
    silenced by foolish, degrading words.
    She clings to a promise, his fancy lie
    for, his true self he cannot hide.
    She looks for the good, knowing it's there,
    for her feelings he doesn't care.
    Her mind says, 'fool! he's using you!'
    but her heart says, 'no, that can't be true.'
    A minute with her is his time wasted.
    She'll never compare to others he's tasted.
    She'll buy the beer, her invitation not made,
    his short-term sweetness is all he'll trade.
    The petals have fallen, the soil has dried
    yet this Lil Rose knows the seed's inside.
    She's blind, she's deaf, stupid and dumb
    the thorns have dulled, her roots are numb.
    'Leave him alone!' cries a voice from within.
    But one smile from him and there she goes again.




    Submitted on 2006-01-28 12:17:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Unfortunately when it comes to matters of the heart we tend to turn a blind eye to the pains and hurt which is sometimes inflicted upon us from a sometimes thoughtless lover i hope you see the light at the end of the rainbow and destiny delivers to you your hearts soul mate.

    Timmy S. Edgar
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, I loved your poem. Thats going on my favorites. For some reason it put tears in my eyes and it reminds me of my last boyfriend. It gave me shivers. Good Job!
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]



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