Description: Just comment on whatever, structure, meaning, I wrote this about what it is like to be alone, and ghosts are wandering souls without homes, so I figured this would be the perfect topic. Enjoy,
pax vobiscum <3
Your rhythms rocked me along all the way - till the second from last word! ;)
Maybe "begins" instead of "dost begin".
The only other line that I had a problem with (grammaticly rather than rhythm) is "The meadow it sparkles;". If you were inclined (again, I don't think this is a must), you could replace "it" with "dew" or "grass".