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    dots Submission Name: A Black and White Exampledots

    Author: Ethan Brody
    ASL Info:    35 - M - Chile
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 443/206/79
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsA Black and White Exampledots

    It came to me
    I saw it clearly
    It made sense.

    I'm not revealing
    A hidden truth
    But the world
    As we know it
    Spins around them.
    As black and white
    May be a simple pair.
    Male and female
    Could help as well.
    The tyger and the lamp
    That's a classic one.
    Noise and silence
    Is just an austere one.

    Even our own existence
    Proves to be one,
    And another case
    That the universe
    As we know it
    Is just a further example.

    Submitted on 2006-01-28 12:53:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    The symbolism is there. I like the comparsion. "tiger and the lamp"
    you have perhaps seen the world for what it is... and have accepted it.
    What I am wondering is, what inspired you to write this? nary a bit of insight here, but i guess it is expected from me???
    ~le beau vide
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by lebeauvide | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice poem about the poles in the world that gives meaning only in pairs ( a lion is not a lion without a lamp etc.)
    What does bother me a bit in this write, is the first lines. By writing yourself (or the author of the poem) out of this poem, it would be more clear cut. The lines I am referring to is: “It came to me/I saw it clearly/It made sense.//I’m not revealing/A hidden truth”. Then rewriting the opening tho something in the lines of: “The world…”
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by tZar | [ Reply to This ]
      Are you pointing out the 'symbolic' nature of complimentary pairs (and their essential need of each other to clarify extremes and provide balance)? If so, it's a remarkably blunt observation of the interwoven character of the universe (and judging by the tone of the poem, you seem appropriately awed by the revelation). I appreciate what this write has to say about humanity in general. Nicely done. Take care. Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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