why do you assume i will always be neer waiting whith my arms open i see the way you leer but i keep hopein
I am beginning to believe your mispelled words are typo's so I want comment on them. I know what you mean truly in this stanza. I went thru it for 6 months. Your feelings were released to your computer as if it was on of your friends. I love stanza one. This stanza revealed to me, as the reader, the passion you display.
i try so hard you know i do but im am broken into little shards why cant i erase you
I felt the same way 6 months ago. You express yourself instead of keeping it inside. The reason I singled out those two stanza's is because I can relate so deeply. Your writing is a way to free yourself. Keep writing and don't stop by any means. You are truly an inspiration to me. I had a block last week. I read one of your poems and the surge just exploded.
i liked this piece, however, i saw some misspells. (i'm not sure if it's intentional) who is this about? your rhymes are clear, the message has impact and the poem itself has feeling. there's nothing worse than loving someone who refuses to offer love in return.
this was almost like a song to me and it reminded me of Green Day but of My Chemical Romance. I hope you don't take that as an insult because to me those are both very good bands. This was a beautiful write. Like Troy said, damn good job. Keep on writing.
is this about a guy? well anyway i liked it a lot. the whole thing flowed well and i think u got ur point across very well. sometimes relationships (if that is what this is about) may seem hopeless and u try for a very long time to make everything right only to find out that u have mearely wasted your time. damn good job. keep it up