Description: Since this is part TWO, I would highly suggest that you read part ONE before reading part TWO...see, that's kinda how numbers work ya know...
I know it's not as dark as some of my other stuff, but just tell me what you think....
Daughter of Darkness 'Part 2' -------------------------------------------
It's been a few weeks since she left
With a fire blazing in her sordid heart
Had to hide a away
From a home-life torn apart
No longer could she take it
Couldn't stand the beatings anymore
Too many black eyes and brusies
And she was out the door
It's like a liberation day
A freedom trip out of Hell
But at the road's end; no one's there
Not as far as she can tell
What was she to do?
There was no possible way
That she could stay there and survive
Through every single next day
A drug addict mother's protests
Alcoholic father's rage
Ignoring this, she crossed the lawn
Away from Hell's prison cage
She gazed at the sky-scrapers
As the rain poured from the sky above
Feeling elated simply knowing
She's left the House-Without-Love
Walking down some unknown path
Dead and twisted trees of the local park
Guide her road to Freedom's bliss
Like a match ignites its spark
This emptiness shall have no avail
These shallow streets she'll roam
Only to face her obstacles
In isolation, she walks alone
this is definitely going on my favorite list. wow, this was just so good. the whole thing was amazing. i can't name a single part that i didn't like. perfection. this was pretty sad though babe. but at the same time it was liberating to see someone get up and do something for themself instead of just taking it and constantly complaining about their very hard life. she made a decision, and stuck with it no matter the consequences
Once again i am not disappointed I love this series they are amazing I wish my Child Of The Dark series was as good as this one seems it'll be I can't wait until the daugther and the son meet like you said they would and how the story goes from there you are so vivid and detailed in your poems and this is going to be an epic series if you decide to continue to work on it keep it up can't wait for the next installment
First, I'd like to say thanks for the comment on my poem. Now onto yours. I really enjoyed this poem, it was worded very well in my opinion. I could literally see the girl as she walked away and her messed up parents yelling at her. I envisioned this really dark house all decrepit and black. It was a very good poem. I'll hafta read the first part.
yay! first commenter *first commenter dance*.I really enjoyed this one...no it wasn't as dark as all of your work but I don't know many who have ONLY dark work...and this still captured alot of truth and emotion, loved the imagry in your last stanza,twisted trees...have you ever seen the video for Goo goo dolls "better days"? it reminds me of this kind of...the trees are bent all different ways and colored light shines on them to reveal words..'faith','peace' 'joy and so on. anyway I liked this one and thought it was a good verse two to a slightly better verse one. peace
Submission Name: Daughter of Darkness 'Part 2'
.I really enjoyed this one...no it wasn't as dark as all of your work but I don't know many who have ONLY dark work...and this still captured alot of truth and emotion, loved the imagry in your last stanza,twisted trees...have you ever seen the video for Goo goo dolls "better days"? it reminds me of this kind of...the trees are bent all different ways and colored light shines on them to reveal words..'faith','peace' 'joy and so on. anyway I liked this one and thought it was a good verse two to a slightly better verse one.