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    dots Submission Name: my love for youdots
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    Author: dublhelix
    ASL Info:    18/m/perth australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 43/36/15
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 146
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    Description:
       its a love poem.
    a famous poet once wrote

    "love is blind. Seek thou the eye that shows no flaw"

    i doubt i'll ever find it. but i search, and in renee i find a possibilty. i hope, and hope...


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    dotsmy love for youdots
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    to assume the wine i gave last night,
    bought of pain and anguish, doubt and fear,
    is My sacrament, my holy death.

    Our love, or at least the seeming form,
    to tether thoughts, before souls torn
    from bindings tough, imprisoned there
    by past, by when we last did dare
    to free the beast from silken cage.

    My love for you IS my pilgrimage.
    Once again, i free the one,
    from bars of dissapointment and hurt,
    to hope again, till it is done,
    and slinks back to its blightened home.
    or, finding like in likes eye....
    lives its life out, free to roam.

    You take in this my holy flesh.
    my meal i cook in bated breath
    to sacrifice myself to sin
    given to my little death
    given to the mood im in,
    seeming illusion, wearing thin.


    All i seek of you in return,
    is that noone has given before....
    i seek the eye that shows no flaw.




    Submitted on 2006-01-29 05:46:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was well written. You really used strong, rich words to describe this.

    'My love for you IS my pilgrimage.
    Once again, i free the one,
    from bars of dissapointment and hurt,
    to hope again, till it is done,
    and slinks back to its blightened home.
    or, finding like in likes eye....
    lives its life out, free to roam.'

    That is my favorite part. Really beautiful.

    'i doubt i'll ever find it. but i search, and in renee i find a possibilty. i hope, and hope...'

    you'll find it, when you need it most.
    After heartbreaks & lonly times you find that person that makes it all better, that makes all the waiting, worth it.
    Never give up hope.
    take care
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really strong, and it was unbelieveably well written. My favorite part was
    "You take in this my holy flesh
    My meal I cook in bated breath
    To scarafice myself to sin
    Given to my little death
    Given to the mood Im in
    Seeming illusion wearing thin"
    Personnaly I think that it had the most emotion, and that always catches the feeling and moment. Great write, and don't worry about not finding someone because your not alone. I doubt I will either.
    Alyssa
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
      My love for you IS my pilgrimage.
    Once again, i free the one,
    from bars of dissapointment and hurt,
    to hope again, till it is done,
    and slinks back to its blightened home.
    or, finding like in likes eye...
    lives its life out, free to roam.

    WOW JUST WOW
    theirs nothing more to say

    xoxo
    that girl
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]



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