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    dots Submission Name: Mr. Beardots
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    Author: Chihuahuii
    ASL Info:    16/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 75/90/36
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Something weird I came up with this morning about a single stuffed bear that's been passed around for generations. (Please let me know if the last stanza sounds unusual to you.)


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    dotsMr. Beardots
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    There's a teddy bear
    Floating down the river,
    Watching me with one button eye
    As it crawls along the water,
    Wet and lonely,
    Cold, can't shiver--
    Whose bear? Mine.
    I put it there.

    No one knows pain quite like the bear
    'Cause the bear is the first to come
    And last to go; drool and drills,
    Tears and fire,
    Tiny children's desires
    Welled so deep in the bear, so taut
    That nothing more can grow.
    Nothing more than hopes and wishes,
    None of them his own.

    The bear didn't ask for money.
    But the little boy did, and bought a mansion.
    The bear didn't ask for fame.
    But the little girl did, and now she's a vixen,
    Tapping on TV in 9-inch heels
    And the bear is still a bear.
    No transformation. No dreams come true,
    Because there are none left,
    A vessel begging for eternal happiness,
    And endless drifting.
    That one dream, I obliged him.
    He floated toward the waterfall
    And seemed to wave goodbye,
    As the last waterlogged paw finally
    Sank.

    Farewell, Mr. Bear.
    May all your dreams come true.
    Don't worry now,
    You're safe under the sea.
    No more dreams.
    No more wishes.
    Those aren't yours to fulfill.
    I have my own. I'll be that millionaire,
    That movie star, that officer,
    That businesswoman,
    On my own,
    No magic button eye, you rest now, bear.
    May all your dreams come true.




    Submitted on 2006-01-29 13:09:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      " the bear is the first to come
    And last to go; drool and drills,
    Tears and fire,
    Tiny children's desires
    Welled so deep in the bear, so taut
    That nothing more can grow.
    Nothing more than hopes and wishes,
    None of them his own."

    I loved this, this was really really really good. It is definitely one for the favs. And the end was all sappy sweet, and I'm a sucker for things like that

    "No magic button eye, you rest now, bear.
    May all your dreams come true."

    Never Stop Writing
    -Caribou-
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      That's an awesome poem! I almost felt sad for the bear at first because he seemed all alone, but then I started to understand where you were going with it. It didn't seem quite right to make the bear sink though, because to me, a teddy bear should always have a child to love, but I guess you have to do something with them after they've been worn to a certain point and letting them go in a river seems much more dignified than throwing them away... Great write! I love how it made me think! I really liked the use of apostrophe, talking to something/someone that is not there, at the end, it concluded your poem beautifully.
    Nik
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by Siberianhearts | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa ho... that is an awesome write. I'm seeing the bear, with rips here and there and stuffing coming out loosely, and the one eye hanging off by the last stitch.

    Great use of personalization exploding into universal, where at once it was yours, but it belongs to everyone, and only the experiences differ. Groovy.

    Thanks for sharing,

    Todd
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by Cigarz | [ Reply to This ]



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