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    dots Submission Name: stalematedots
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    Author: realpassion
    ASL Info:    27/Male/Nigeria
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 81/70/50
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 790
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    Bytes: 542



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    Standing low, it narrowed into a damp path
    Causing an excited euphoria.
    An ordeal which sends a mesage into the realm invisible...
    First of its kind which was abruptly halted
    Consciously, leading to a rather stalemate.
    Heightened cravings fondled 'Two Industrious
    Explorers' mildly and leaves behind a blank
    Space which a turn 'round only could refill.
    The score result---Two unsatiated winners
    Emerging with undissipated stamina.






    Submitted on 2006-01-29 15:34:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Parts of it I understood, I might know what it's about, but I'm so confused right now. It depends on what kind of passion we're talking about emotional passion or love passion. I actually liked the fact that it confused me, lol, I did. But could you get back to me about what it's actually about? I'd appreciate it. Good write.
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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