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    dots Submission Name: harsh words from an Angeldots
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    Author: atonement
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    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsharsh words from an Angeldots
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    I am going mad lying in my bed. The words she whispers to me is like darkness, blinding and cruel. She speaks of night, the silence, the rupture of bonds, an abyss of broken promises. She sings me the lullaby of night, nightingale of my nightmares. I know that this is my final lullaby, my trip into forever darkness




    Submitted on 2006-01-29 15:45:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not sure what to say here. This was utter dullsville. You created one small image in my head with this write, which made no sense. Don't even get me started on the format. How do you expect a reader to follow along when it is impossible to follow the flow of your writing?
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by ThisIsReal | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great. It maid me feel every line. It maid me think hard even though it was short. good job. I agree with Toxic_Rayne it was a good structure and I also dont like paragraphed
    stories. Thats for music, but I got to learn to write my style in paragraphes. I t was a great read for me.
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautifully dark. I loved it! I liked the paragraph form, which is the second one that I liked today, lol, cuz I usually don't like paragraph form poems. But this and the other one I read today were exceptions. I've read so many poems from new users today, is it like national sign up day or something? lol, well, good write...oh, hey, wait, I noticed that you're from Canada. WE're going there this summer, is it any good up there?
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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