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    dots Submission Name: Lessdots
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    Author: MyHeart2Yours
    ASL Info:    18.female.Pennsylavnia
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 96/112/42
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 145
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 854



    Description:
       It needs some work, but it was how I happened to feel at the time.


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    dotsLessdots
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    Hold still, don’t say the name
    Of the one who’s brought upon the pain
    Taste the blood of life and spit out the demons
    Grasping your body
    Choking you from the inside
    Freeing you of the feeling of pain
    Watch the moments slip
    Can’t hold on forever
    Nothing makes sense, nothing matches
    You’re worlds been flipped
    Match has been set
    Grab your best defenses, you’ll need them
    Battle the fight inside, scorch the swelling fire
    Kick to the gut,
    Rope around the neck
    You’re giving up hope
    Feelings flooded to the surface like a head rush to the brain
    Blood spilling over the wine glasses of the rich
    As you bleed for the poor
    Yet you sit here,
    blow after blow, can’t get to your knees
    You’ve settled for less




    Submitted on 2006-01-29 17:14:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with Akaila, it was kinda an abrubt ending and it caught me off guard in a somewhat bad way. Overall, this was a beautifully written poem and I enjoyed it very, very much. Very dark and sinister. I loved it. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      hey! i like this but the ending was kinda abrupt like u wanted to say more but u just stop! but everything else waz good! it had a good message and the flow waz nie up until the end! good job!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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