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    dots Submission Name: Nothing But A Dreamdots
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    Author: darkened_soul
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 812/868/171
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Every girl has a crush on a celebrity at one point in their life. This is my point!!!!


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    dotsNothing But A Dreamdots
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    I can only see you,
    On the face of this screen
    I can't be any closer
    It's all just a dream.

    I cannot love you
    The way i always wanted
    I can only watch you
    And the girls you've flaunted.

    I realize this can't be
    That this love isn't real
    You're a world-wide musician
    I'm confused on how i feel.

    I can't take my glare
    Off the screen infront of me
    And so i sit here dreaming
    Of what can never be.

    But as the days go by
    Nothing changes, i feel the same
    I just want you to notice me
    Or even to know my name.

    But i guess it's just a hope
    A false reality
    So i sit here knowing
    It's nothing but a dream.




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      Aww yeah it's the "so far away syndrome". I know I have the hugest crush on a celeb & many times I've felt the same. But it's also not only for a celeb crush b/c at one point in all our lives, we want someone we seemingly can never have.

    <3 Jess
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Lil J | [ Reply to This ]
      jaime.... ct?.... yes? am i wrong? i think i might be a little bit though even if you say i'm not.... either way its kinda like a cutesy form of emo! YES ALL THINGS ARE EMO!!!!!!!! they need a section called emo for sub category of what genre your poem is! i'd so read those posts!
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Dead_alive | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoy the concept of this poem, you defitely got that right, everyone goes through this stage, some just never grow out of it.:). so if I may ask, who is your celebrity dream? Mine is Corey Taylor from slipknot... god...you've just inspired me, I think I know what my next write will involve, lol, excellent job!
    Vicious
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      uuummm... I don't know if I liked this one. Don't get me wrong, it had nice flow and rythme, but I don't really like the whole "celebrity crush" thing. You seem to have some talent, so try writing about more realistic crushes, or how you're feeling about something. Then I think I would respect you more as a writer.
    Alyssa
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
      written very well. love...its a tricky thing. Noticing them and them never noticing you. Hope things get real better for you:-)
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by aprilrenee101 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely written. well balanced and descriptive. Is this comment better than now comment at all? i'm sorry i like your poem and i wanted to say so, but i really haven't much else to say about it
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by Topher Vine | [ Reply to This ]
      OH, I LIKE THIS. AND THE REASON I DO IS BECAUSE I HAD A CRUSH VERY LONG AGO, ON A SUPERSTAR. I REMEMBER WISHING THAT HE KNEW I WAS ALIVE ON THIS EARTH. AFTER ALL HE LIVED HERE TOO AND WE'D HAVE TO MEET SOMEDAY,LOL.
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah one of my friends told me that all girls have a crush on at least one famous person. this was ok. nice pic by the way
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not entirely sure who its directed to, but the just another face in the crowd syndrome of thought doesn't only occur to people with celebrity crushes sadly. Many people long for even possibly love someone out of reach to them. But the best part about those feelings is knowing that at least you have those feelings to offer to someone... Don't give up jope so easily, you're stillyoung. Love may find you in the least expected ways ;-)
    SAM
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by speedrocketguit | [ Reply to This ]
      evem if it wasn;t about a celeberty.. this is a cute poem about a crush that could and im sure has happened to most of us...
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]


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