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    dots Submission Name: Mercedes de Acostadots
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    Author: drowning_queen
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 245/270/52
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 825
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    Description:
       Mercedes de Acosta, famous lesbian playwright/poet and lover to the stars.


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    dotsMercedes de Acostadots
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    You call me “the greatest starfucker ever”
    “the dyke at the top of the stairs”
    You mark me as what I am
    This dark, deviant thing--
    Slicked-back, cut and polished
    Imposing on pointed heels
    Perverted playwright poet
    But what of my love?
    What of the fire-flames
    curling painfully in my belly?

    You remember me for the sex
    Gallienne, Garbo, Dietrich
    All those shimmering celebritantes
    Precious, pointless things
    Destined to break both our hearts
    I’ve emptied the inkwell of my affection
    painting sonnets for their eyes
    Draining myself across the pale
    of their perfect, pliant breasts

    You know me not as I know myself
    Proud, powerful, passionate
    You see me as a fraction of who I am
    A silver sliver of the true glimmer
    That blaze-bright intensity
    Separating the lovers from the loved
    You choose not to see me but
    See the masks you place upon me
    The walls you construct to reign me in

    I’m not afraid of your preaching
    I’m already burning brilliantly







    Submitted on 2006-01-29 22:28:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love your poem, de Acosta's memoirs is one of the best books I've ever read, your last two lines should be said every day by those who are constantly judged by those who have no right to judge. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-01-25 00:00:00 | by moonchildiva | [ Reply to This ]
      Brilliant poetry, beloved...
    This sparkles and glints as if it were in the middle of a bonfire... like the thoughts of a burnéd witch... which back then, being a lesbian was basically the equivalent to being a witch in the 1700's...

    I do have one error to correct, though...
    Very simple, it is... 'reign' should be 'rein'... the former being meant as sovereign power, the latter being to rein something in as if by the straps on a horse... or any means of control...

    This is definitely going in the préféré box...
    Your writings are magnificent.
    ~Syn


    | Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by Syn | [ Reply to This ]
      how sad it is that we all tend to get catagorized and placed neatly into a particular file, stored away as This and This only, when in reality we are all far more complex and at the very least should all be thrown into a Miscellaneous file. I'm sure she was so much more than what we want to remember her as and you do a great job of getting inside of her (no pun intended). This is the first I've heard of her but you do have me intrigued so I will surely investigate.

    I'm a sucker for good alliteration and you give me plenty to drool over here. You cleverly mix this alliteration with rhyme and assonance to form this wonderful kind of sound soup that just melts in my mouth...yeah, that's what you do to me here...this is HOT!

    what a way to introduce me to your work! I will make a point of getting my work done as quickly as possible so I can return to your page for more.

    if I were to offer a suggestion (and I guess I am right now, for whatever it's worth) it would be to either drop the caps at the start of your lines or add caps to the one's where you don't have them. if you were, say, only using caps at the start of sentences, that would be one thing, but the usage is inconsistent and following no particular pattern (that I can see) and thus I find it to be a bit distracting in an otherwise flawless and compelling piece.

    stunning, really...
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by deadndreaming | [ Reply to This ]
      Kristina, I decided to fave this after deleting your 'Fallacies' post as a fave - I did like it but I think this one shows your voice so much better. The other post didn't do that much for me compared to this. And I've just done a whole bunch of housecleaning in relation to favourite additions - it seems like people have been deleting their damn poems lately... grrr.

    Sorry for the lamo comment... I'm sure you'll get over it lol. And I've already gone into this with my first comment... so there's not much else to say.

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      Flawless

    The quotes seemed sloppy when I first read it but then I really read through and enjoyed them

    Your vocabulary is amazing and this really displays a background knowledge. This makes me want to either memorize an expanded thesarus or go read some of mercedes poetry.

    Either way, this is amazing and nothing less

    ciao
    Brandy
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by rockunsilenced | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really great piece. It is beautifully written. I love this mixture; you speak freely, to the point yet with such delicacy. It is very complex, profound poem. We all want to be loved for what we really are. And it is so hard not to get lost in the picture of us. It is so difficult to distinct who we think we are and what other people think of us (especially people that we love). I think I’m getting lost sometimes. But your Mercedes knows, always. And that’s inspiring.
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      oh god this is beautifully written. I can see your admiration for this chick, it's sad how those little perspective created "blemish's" can be what your seen as. ugh.

    so back to the piece, and just a general props to you.

    you have a way with words

    now don't get all excited about that huge compliment lol

    let me explain....
    ugh i can't damnit, idk you have an elegance and beauty to the way you say things....and it feels like you feel them. so just as a person i think that's pretty awesome.

    there's not to much i can give on this piece as it's far better than what i could do....that is as of right now, i'm young so watch out harhar....meh. i think this is my favortie poem from you. thanks for the fav and showing people how it's done, so if i ask you to write everyday will you? i'm not afraid to be a prick for my own selfish gain.

    later
    Ryan
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, I had to look up Mercedes De Acosta to find out exactly who she was... even though you outlined her, I still wanted to know about her a bit more in-depth - apparently she got it on with quite a few ladies - Greta Garbo, Marlene Dietrich, Alla Nazimova, Eva Le Gallienne, Isadora Duncan, Katharine Cornell, Maude Adams, Ona Munson, Adele Astaire and others - my god, that's a lot, and I'm actually familiar with some of those names.

    I think this is a subject close to your heart... and you play your cards well in this write, by drawing me in and getting into her persona right from the start.

    I won't go into an in-depth critique because, quite frankly, it's all laid out here in unabashed honesty, which I like. You've given me an inside look into her personality - I don't know if you've researched this but it seems like you have.

    I like the instances of alliteration and occasional rhyme that you employ - it's noticeable but it doesn't overpower this piece - it just lends it... more in the way of sonic rhythm I guess.

    The last two lines were a great summation of this character and a great way to go out with a bang.

    Yea, very nice Kristina... what else can I say?
    Peace,

    Jase

    P.S. I just dug this up... The last poem Mercedes de Acosta wrote for Garbo was in 1944, after Garbo had pretty much rejected her. Mercedes laments:
    You belong to me. Some things just belong to other things; There is no other way. Why not let us then say,
    for example . . . the salt to the sea,
    A bird to the sky . . . and you to me!
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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