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    dots Submission Name: Whydots

    Author: DonKB
    ASL Info:    34/m/goergia
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 19/17/11
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    aAs i sit and wonder why
    These things run thur my mind
    Ever so loudly a sceaming pain
    which haunts down deep in my soul
    I see it all too brightly
    The images are too clear
    These visions that i find
    Are running all thur time
    Confused and wondering why
    I sould live or I sould die
    And These visions that I see
    I ones imprisoning me
    And now I try to find the reasons why
    My life got turned upside down
    And the appartion of my mind
    Will finally fade in time

    Submitted on 2006-01-29 23:47:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it rables a bit and there are quite a few spelling and grammatical errors. of course, with those corrections, it'd probably make more sense.

    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by prettygrnEyes | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this piece alot. i know the feeling of asking 'why?' but never finding the answer. keep up the great writes and i hope to read more by you soon.
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]

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