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    dots Submission Name: The end note to a pathetic songdots
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    Author: haileebobailee
    ASL Info:    18/F/NV
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 30/41/15
    Words: 362
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       meh I think it speaks for itself really...he is an ass


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    dotsThe end note to a pathetic songdots
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    Crying never came easy to me.
    So I squeezed my eyes closed
    just to prove I could shed
    one tear for you.

    The sound of heavy breathing filled
    the room and the glow
    of the computer screen
    cast a small light
    over the bed
    that I was laying in

    I thought about the night
    we talked until my phone died
    and your dad yelled at you.
    We laughed and with a “sweet dreams”
    and a rushed I love you
    we let the connection end.

    I put on my headphones
    and played the first song
    you sang to me.
    “Someday lady you’ll accompany me”
    filled my ears
    and I giggled
    because you couldn’t carry a tune.

    You joked about us making memories.
    Flying for the first time,
    watching movies
    until the sun came up.

    Let’s face it, the memories
    were never made.
    Instead we fought,
    and I left you standing
    in the snow
    outside of my house.

    You never listened,
    so I let you drive home drunk.
    Then waited
    for the phone call
    I knew I wasn’t going to get.

    Your lack of responsibility
    showed on the Wednesday
    afternoon when you came to my house
    smelling of Sparks.
    Then with a smirk you told
    me that you had to pick up your sister.

    I called you when I went back to college.
    I could hear the radio playing
    behind you, and you used
    that as your excuse to not answering the first time.

    You wasted no time
    on small talk,
    instead you spoke your mind
    and told me the breakup
    was my fault.
    I told you to grow up,
    then the call ended
    with a bitter I hate you,
    and our friendship
    ended when you couldn’t tell me the truth.

    I opened my eyes
    Because the tears
    Wouldn't come and realized
    That maybe you were never important
    Maybe I did care
    Once but now you are just the end
    To my pathetic song




    Submitted on 2006-01-30 01:00:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really liked this one a lot! you were able to clearly explain the situation, without telling me to much... i like how you didnt describe the people all that much, it leaves room for picturing them the way you want to... i think im going to add this one to my favorites just because i can't really find anything wrong with it...

    keep up the good writinng
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by jen531 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! Sounds like he was a real nice guy? NOT! Well just remember there are lot of people in the world who will never get the chance to love or be loved and its better to have loved then to have never loved at all.
    This was well writen and better luck next time.
    Kelley
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe this one should be titled- "The end of a pathetic song"- not quite sure I understand the "not" being there- when you are indeed- trying to "end it" also check "shed on tear" typo? (shed A tear?) I'm not one to nit-pick- but I just did. (Ha) I can understand the emotion- and think this would be even better understood with just a dash of rhyme to it- Keep writing- Bonnie
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by delusional | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, this is sad. I'm sorry this had to happen, it always sucks when friendships end.
    You may want to change the line
    >never were made<
    to
    >were never made<

    "“Someday lady you’ll accompany me”
    filled my ears
    and I giggled
    because you couldn’t carry a tune. "

    I really liked that part.
    Keep Writing
    -Caribou-
    p.s. even if your mad at someone never let them drive home drunk. he was lucky...
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]


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