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Submission Name: My Keyboard dots

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Author:	Lulu La Feyne
ASL Info:	16/female/Australia
Elite Ratio:	3.59 - 72/99/30
Words:	111

Class/Type:	Poetry/Comedy
Total Views:	347
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Description:
You know what....

It's a miracle I typed this up without a keyboard...

My Keyboard dots

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I wish I had a keyboard
All shiny and brand new
But all I have is paper
And a dusty CPU

If I had a keyboard
I would press the key, F4
Just to see what it would do,
And what it is used for.

If I had a keyboard
I would learn to type,
Every finger for a key
I would practice every night

If I had a keyboard
Life would be much better
I could finally sit and type
You, my dear, a letter

If I wrote a letter,
In it I might add,
Please buy me a keyboard
I really need one, bad!

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  ya as som1 said earlier i was thnking how good can a poem be for a keyboard, then i read urs and thought wow this a good keyboard poem, i just got my keyboard 2 days ago for my dads house, but at my moms i have real.. there so fun, have u tried keyboard? its really funn, thats just me and many others.. lol
| Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by SkullMyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
  ha ha, this is really cute, I loved it!
Very good rhyming and rhythm:

If I had a keyboard
I would learn to type,
Every finger for a key
I would practice every night

If I had a keyboard
Life would be much better
I could finally sit and type
You, my dear, a letter

I got a laugh out of this whole thing, a great piece this is. I think I'll add it to my favorites...

great job

have a cookie

avril54
| Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]
  lol... that's great! *ponders* how did you get this up here without a keyboard? i know that if mine went out then i would be totally screwed over.
but anyways, cute little poem. it has nice timing when you read it out loud. hopefully you've gotten a keyboard by now, i know it's hell without one...

thanks for sharing this fun little write with us

-jess
| Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]
  haha... surprising enough, i found this quite ammusing... there were some parts though where the wording could be improved, i dunno, im not a world famous poet or nethin... but i really think you did an awesome job. keep writing and God bless you!
~Josh
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by godsminion | [ Reply to This ]
  HA! HA!
First off...how in the world to you type without a keyboard? Hmmmm...the mysteries of the CPU astound me!

This was a pretty nice write too! I think you put it together quite well!

If you need a keyboard, let me know...I have one collecting dust in my closet.
Thanks for sharing!

| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  Well this was funny and fun to read too! It actually reminds me of a poem I wrote sometime back called "The Art Of Writing Poetry" Maybe you could read it sometime and see what I mean. Anyway I enjoyed reading your poem and I hope you find your keyboard soon!
Take care,
!doc'
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  I had a good chuckle while reading this because I remember many years ago thinking the same thing. Then I also thought about how much fun writing the old fashioned way can sometimes be, especially if you are a doodler, then your works of art can be incorporated into your words. I agree with painofthanotos with regards to some of the verses being a little odd in the flow but it kind of helps lend the quirky feeling to the poem. Thanks for the read.
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by auntwheezie | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a really cute write
I really liked the simpleness of this write
I cant help but think if you were writing thou about how we as a race have lost a lot of the simple ethics that really made life much better and a much better feeling of togetherness back in the past
I enjoyed reading this one
God Bless
Your Friend
Ron
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  HA- Being old like I am- I PREFER the old prehistoric pen and paper- and THEN typing all those thoughts into a machine- It seems to make them more real to me- its you're thoughts - coming from your hand- cant be that bad- however you have to get them out there- get them out there- Nice rhyming here- cant pick at it too much- your thoughts were clear- Take care- Bonnie
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by delusional | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the way it started and I love this, it was hilarious. Some of the stanzas flowed a little odd, but just the same it was still awesome.
I wonder how you managed though?
Did you copy and past letters from other documents with your mouse? That's what I would do...bet it took a long time. lol.
Keep Writing
-Caribou-
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
  funny as, well done. the first bit set it up well 'all i have is paper and a dusty cpu' you have a definate knack for rhyme. the words seem to roll out so smoothly. this is a cracker. i think if you ever suffer from mouse probs you should grace us with another.

ps. if you ever find out what f4 does let me know :)
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by wilburwildchild | [ Reply to This ]
  That was cute. I liked it. Nice rhyme. This piece was fun to read. I especially liked the ending. This is different from what i usually read.

Saint Kairo
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Saint | [ Reply to This ]
  lol
good job on the rhymes and every thing
i rea lly enjoyed rea ding it
i am rea lly curious, though , were you insp ired by a real incident or di d yo u ju st write this out of the blues
let me know

"I would practice every night"

this line, i think, ywould sound better like this,

"I would practice day and night"

good write
thanks for sharing
john*
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  I kind of wondered if this would be any good. I mean, how interesting can a poem about not having a keyboard be? Totally awesome. :)
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Shuurinakisame | [ Reply to This ]

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