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    dots Submission Name: My Keyboarddots
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    Author: Lulu La Feyne
    ASL Info:    18/female/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 72/101/31
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 945
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 643



    Description:
       You know what....

    It's a miracle I typed this up without a keyboard...


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    dotsMy Keyboarddots
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    I wish I had a keyboard
    All shiny and brand new
    But all I have is paper
    And a dusty CPU

    If I had a keyboard
    I would press the key, F4
    Just to see what it would do,
    And what it is used for.

    If I had a keyboard
    I would learn to type,
    Every finger for a key
    I would practice every night

    If I had a keyboard
    Life would be much better
    I could finally sit and type
    You, my dear, a letter

    If I wrote a letter,
    In it I might add,
    Please buy me a keyboard
    I really need one, bad!




    Submitted on 2006-01-30 02:31:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ya as som1 said earlier i was thnking how good can a poem be for a keyboard, then i read urs and thought wow this a good keyboard poem, i just got my keyboard 2 days ago for my dads house, but at my moms i have real.. there so fun, have u tried keyboard? its really funn, thats just me and many others.. lol
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by SkullMyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      ha ha, this is really cute, I loved it!
    Very good rhyming and rhythm:

    If I had a keyboard
    I would learn to type,
    Every finger for a key
    I would practice every night

    If I had a keyboard
    Life would be much better
    I could finally sit and type
    You, my dear, a letter

    I got a laugh out of this whole thing, a great piece this is. I think I'll add it to my favorites...

    great job

    have a cookie

    avril54
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]
      lol... that's great! *ponders* how did you get this up here without a keyboard? i know that if mine went out then i would be totally screwed over.
    but anyways, cute little poem. it has nice timing when you read it out loud. hopefully you've gotten a keyboard by now, i know it's hell without one...

    thanks for sharing this fun little write with us

    -jess
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]
      haha... surprising enough, i found this quite ammusing... there were some parts though where the wording could be improved, i dunno, im not a world famous poet or nethin... but i really think you did an awesome job. keep writing and God bless you!
    ~Josh
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by godsminion | [ Reply to This ]
      HA! HA!
    First off...how in the world to you type without a keyboard? Hmmmm...the mysteries of the CPU astound me!

    This was a pretty nice write too! I think you put it together quite well!

    If you need a keyboard, let me know...I have one collecting dust in my closet.
    Thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Well this was funny and fun to read too! It actually reminds me of a poem I wrote sometime back called "The Art Of Writing Poetry" Maybe you could read it sometime and see what I mean. Anyway I enjoyed reading your poem and I hope you find your keyboard soon!
    Take care,
    !doc'
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      I had a good chuckle while reading this because I remember many years ago thinking the same thing. Then I also thought about how much fun writing the old fashioned way can sometimes be, especially if you are a doodler, then your works of art can be incorporated into your words. I agree with painofthanotos with regards to some of the verses being a little odd in the flow but it kind of helps lend the quirky feeling to the poem. Thanks for the read.
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by auntwheezie | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really cute write
    I really liked the simpleness of this write
    I cant help but think if you were writing thou about how we as a race have lost a lot of the simple ethics that really made life much better and a much better feeling of togetherness back in the past
    I enjoyed reading this one
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      HA- Being old like I am- I PREFER the old prehistoric pen and paper- and THEN typing all those thoughts into a machine- It seems to make them more real to me- its you're thoughts - coming from your hand- cant be that bad- however you have to get them out there- get them out there- Nice rhyming here- cant pick at it too much- your thoughts were clear- Take care- Bonnie
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by delusional | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the way it started and I love this, it was hilarious. Some of the stanzas flowed a little odd, but just the same it was still awesome.
    I wonder how you managed though?
    Did you copy and past letters from other documents with your mouse? That's what I would do...bet it took a long time. lol.
    Keep Writing
    -Caribou-
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      funny as, well done. the first bit set it up well 'all i have is paper and a dusty cpu' you have a definate knack for rhyme. the words seem to roll out so smoothly. this is a cracker. i think if you ever suffer from mouse probs you should grace us with another.

    ps. if you ever find out what f4 does let me know :)
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by wilburwildchild | [ Reply to This ]
      That was cute. I liked it. Nice rhyme. This piece was fun to read. I especially liked the ending. This is different from what i usually read.

    Saint Kairo
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Saint | [ Reply to This ]
      lol
    good job on the rhymes and every thing
    i rea lly enjoyed rea ding it
    i am rea lly curious, though , were you insp ired by a real incident or di d yo u ju st write this out of the blues
    let me know

    "I would practice every night"

    this line, i think, ywould sound better like this,

    "I would practice day and night"

    good write
    thanks for sharing
    john*
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      I kind of wondered if this would be any good. I mean, how interesting can a poem about not having a keyboard be? Totally awesome. :)
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Shuurinakisame | [ Reply to This ]


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