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Author: obaid
ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
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based on a true story!


With all the evil that exists in this world it was hard for me to believe that such innocence and fragility still existed. So much warmth, so much love! Fool I'd have been if I hadn't fallen for it.

I stared and scutinized every bit just to be sure it wasn't a mirage. Overjoyed- I was to find it was the truth- it was a blessing!

I began to hope that i would be taken in, that I would be loved and cared again. There was always an irritating 'IF'! What if I don't deserve it? Hence I began to rejoice every second I was near it, I captured and fragmented evey sight I had of it.

And now......'m drifting away from sanity- lost in a dream world where I'm happy and merry with YOU! Yes, it's you- you are THE BLESSING!

Submitted on 2006-01-30 05:12:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  SAME HERE: that's all I gotta say. They were blessings from above, maybe we didn't deserve them! Or did we?! Don't know for certain. Gotta ask the Lord after I die!
| Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]'s late as I comment, so this, of course, isn't quite registering...hold on while i go back and try to make some more sense of it...

okay, rereading, i think it's about someone coming in while your surrounded by horrible things or

sorry, it's late and i'm having trouble doing good comments.
So, good job, keep it up, and...

| Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]
  Based on a true story he ? I hope your dream comes true. 'If' can really be a pain in the ***, What if ... makes you wonder about all the possibility's and you keep dreaming 'till you can face the truth. I hope the truth brings you joy in life. Nice poem, keep it up.
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Tom110989 | [ Reply to This ]

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