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    dots Submission Name: Summer comes, Summer goesdots
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    Author: kellz
    ASL Info:    25/F/England
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 122/148/49
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 462
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    Description:
       My dream of summer


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    dotsSummer comes, Summer goesdots
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    Like the sand between my toes
    summer's cloudless days
    And soaking up the sun's warm rays
    Timeless, drifting, free form hours
    Bird chirps, butterflies, and flowers.
    Already feeling chill in air
    Trees dropping leaves, becoming bare
    Warm days grow shorter, losing light
    Autumn's dampness shrouds the night.
    "Please don't go" cries summer heart
    Too soon the evening shadows dart
    Once more I feel inner child's old fear
    Will summer come again next year?
    Like an old friend, she slips from view
    As Autumn gains in firery hue
    Age has brought new whispered fear
    Will you see summer come again next year?
    In bright barreness of early fall
    I now hear mortality's frosty call
    Praying to God as I feel a tear
    Please let me live just one more year.
    Goodbye my best friend,
    as summer comes and summer goes.........




    Submitted on 2004-04-29 13:03:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey, this was good. A bit shaky to start with, but it gained strength as it went on and I really enjoyed it..

    Autumn's dampness shrouds the night.
    That was my favourite line.. I'm not entirely sure why, but I just seemed to "click" with that.
    Well done!
    | Posted on 2004-04-29 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      pimpled flesh and a chill,from your oh so relieving pill,in a way only a poet's prescription could describe my feelings on the same subject,glad there is some one to relate to on a few levels of lifes dark sides and more,lifes offerings,cause i forget ,and a reminder is allways a good idea,like it or not.
    and i needed that,
    i am a big fan of beach feet,so clean,sun tanned ,sandy smell,feels like life s being precious once again to me when i get to experiance them of my own accord.

    thatb peice is veryVERY,worth a publication.
    wont u try a few zines emailings for contributing
    readers digest,some new york mags,some where that would share it with the others that might need to be reminded of part of whats really important.
    you know i invision all mthe different smiles of all the different faces that would read that in poem form,
    and THAT would be known as the poets sculpture
    SORRY, there i go again,

    makin the world a love latte, that kellz is!
    (you know what a latte is ,i hope. or else this wont make sense )

    paulie d (a fan)
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by paulie d | [ Reply to This ]



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