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    dots Submission Name: Newspaper Nationdots
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    Author: Universal
    ASL Info:    17/f/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 46/48/35
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 902
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1041



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    dotsNewspaper Nationdots
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    Lead by bridled frustration, a self induced sedation
    Hollow Conservative class, letting dreams pass.
    Wishing the ideals were real, a message we could feel
    But censorship suffocates and the meaning dissipates.

    Still striving for balance, oil in its gallons
    Directing a world where commerce is hurled
    Like a trophy of leisure, hobby governments endeavor
    While the poor keep dying and buyers keep buying.

    Empty shells with faces, stand in their places
    Filled with propaganda, another mans slander.
    Blind by acceptance, only learn via past tense
    Hungry for leaders who blanket and bleed us.

    False rights provide assertion, superiority exertion.
    Covered in invisible labels, relying on fables
    Social conscience is abstract, morality was a cutback.
    We are freedom on probation, another newspaper nation.

    Dissolved in our indifference
    (Contrary to belief)Submission is no defense




    Submitted on 2006-01-30 07:45:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think this is great this is the kind of thing i enjoy reading there are to many parts i liked in this to write them down with out copying it over again i love it and it definitey gonna be a fav.

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    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by cartoon autopsy | [ Reply to This ]
      This reads like a rap song. It presents the reader with a picture of stifled expression. I agree with Twila that it needs more punctuation. I'm not sure I completely understand what the author is saying. It has great rhyming throughout.
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Ms. Gifted | [ Reply to This ]
      It just so happens I was listening to Rage Against the Machine's, Calm like a Bomb, when I read this. If these were song lyrics they'd fit nicely with the song. I like your "Social conscience" presented here, some of your stanzas don't add up. However, if you added puctuation it would make those ideas whole thoughts. "There's a right to obey, and there's a right to kill." -RAM
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Twila | [ Reply to This ]


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