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If I Were A Poet -------------------------------------------
If I were a poet;
My love would be able to feel
Each emotional nuance of the love
I feel for her from my words.
I would be able to show her that
Each corner of my soul
Is filled to overflowing with everything she is.
She would see that my heart grows each day
With the love I feel for her.
She would know that everytime I see her
I want to take her gently in my arms
And love her for the rest of my life.
She'll know how I feel physically each time
She walks by me and I smell each scent that is her.
If I were a poet;
My words would paint a wondrous picture
Of love, caring and the sensous wonder of her.
well, to put myself in your place.. if i could express how i felt toward this person everso beautifully, gracefully using the perfect words-in a poem, i wonder,would they really fall for me? well, honestly.. i can only speak from experience. falling in love is one thing, but finding it is another. you have an idea about how you feel about her.. but the assumption that u aren't a poet, but would love to be.. didn't set well. try leaving out the "if i were".. and the word "would". change it around abit and put yourself in the place of really being a poet. have a little faith and it'll turn out all right. i wish the best for you. later.
your words did paint a wondrous picture, I just loved this write even though it was short but then maybe it being short is what made it all the more powerful thanks for the read I'm glad you shared this with us adnil
That is the sweetest thing I have ever read. I honestly think that you have every "nuance" of a true poet. You did paint that picture, and altho this poem is short, it conveys a message of true love and understanding of another human being. Another thing I can plainly see is that you are perfectly sincere. That, in itself is extreamly rare. I wish someone would write something like this for me...lol I hope your poetic journey leads you to better and higher places than Elite. blessed be, Melancholetta
Well...seems to me you are a poet. This hold a very important powerful message of you love for this person. Maybe you could make this a challange foe the rest of the EliteSkillers to write about what they would say to their love if they were poets. Just an idea mind ya, but, I think it would be a good challange. Enjoyed the read... !doc'
This is a really sweet and thoughtful write I understand the emotion you are writing of Love is a delicate thing and sometimes it just dosent work out the way we imagined love would I hope and Pray you find Peace God Bless Ron
Please if you get a chance please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
Well it seems to me the Portrait of love has been painted here... You say: "If I were a poet I would paint a wonderous picture... I think the imagry is there. Although I do favor poems that have a rhyme scheme to them, you got your point accross and maybe that's all that matters. Besides you have an average vote of 5.0 and that's pretty dawg-gone good! I think my favorite line in this poem is: I feel for her with my words. That line struck me in the right way. If you think about it, that's really a nice thing to say. I think you have made your feeling clear for tis mystery person, so why not make the mystery person clear to the rest of us? I enjoyed the peom but think it would have added to the overall first impression of the poem if we knew who this person is... !doc'
Submission Name: If I Were A Poet
