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    dots Submission Name: duck, duck, GOOSE!dots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 668
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    Bytes: 1000



    Description:
       I met a terribly insolent duck at the park the other day. He needed a lecture, and he got one. However, he refused to learn his lesson.


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    Hey Mr. Duck, where'd you come from
    And just where do you plan to go?
    Strangely enough, you're so very chubby
    That you waddle really slow.
    Mr. Ducky, have a fry,
    Cause you look like you could eat.
    You snatched a fry from between my fingers
    My gosh, that's kind of neat.
    Mr. Ducky, I think it's time
    To say that you've had enough.
    Save some for the other duckies
    You don't have to act so tough.
    Mr Ducky, I am apalled
    At your behavior today
    There was no need to bite Miss Ducky
    I just don't know what to say.
    Mr. Ducky, you're quite the bully
    There'll be no more fries for you
    Don't give me your ducky insolence
    What do you plan to do?
    Mr. Ducky, you'd be much better off,
    If you were a kinder, gentler duck.
    Mr. Ducky just wanders away,
    Saying, "I don't give a fuck."




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      Hey this was cool...why have I never read it? *frowns and bites lip contemplating ones own question* I liked it a lot. You know something histerical...Clay Webber was our history teacher today and it was just amusing to say the least. I think that he will be a VERY good Mr. Pritchett, and he comes with the lamo teacher jokes and everything.LOl.
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      *after laughing*

    Poems with little things like that are just wonderful.
    Your little narrative was cute and appealing from the get go. Almost as if a little girl were feeding the ducks.
    Well... minus the cursing, but you know.

    good stuff.
    ~Michael
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Blaargh | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah! I absoutly loved this poem! It was so beautiful and fun, oh and it was just wonderful. Very very good job dear cousin. I really liked the rhyme scheme. It flowed wonderfully. I must say that my favorite liens were,
    'Mr. Ducky, have a fry,
    Cause you look like you could eat.
    You snatched a fry from between my fingers
    My gosh, that's kind of neat.'

    This had sort of a childish innocence to it all.
    [Concerning our prom plans, Jensie has offered to help, that is if we can pry her away from Derrick long enough. We need to make a list and go thrift shop hopping this weekend.]
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      hehe... i got a little chuckle at the end.. my favorate part:
    Mr. Ducky just wanders away,
    Saying, "I don't give a [censored]."
    greedy little [censored]!
    i enjoy reading stuff about animals, by the way.
    later,
    sarah
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by vohomegirl | [ Reply to This ]
      damn. that is one intense duck...though i hate to say it, it sounds as though you may have some sort of prejudice against fat ducks...i could just not let that stand.

    peace. (between people and ducks)
    meredith.
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by art_is_hard | [ Reply to This ]
      HA! HA! This was fun to read. The flow of it fit very well together and the story was enjoyable!
    Goofy ducks! I had two pairs of geese that would argue back and forth at each other in my neighborhood last spring. Animals are funny!
    Thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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