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    dots Submission Name: Cigarette Burndots

    Author: haileebobailee
    ASL Info:    18/F/NV
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 30/41/15
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCigarette Burndots

    It was a cigarette lighter love,
    a spark, a flame,
    and then emptiness
    in a plastic bottle.

    I sat on the curb
    While you wasted
    Your breath
    On pointless apologies

    So sick of pretending
    You reached for my hand
    And I reached
    For a grasp
    On reality

    You had promised
    Me starry night skies
    And then left me
    With cloudy grey nothingness

    My cigarette burns
    A bright red
    And the lights
    Change from yellow to green

    The chill of the air
    Makes it hard to distinguish
    Breath from smoke
    And the ashes fall
    To the concrete

    You were my nicotine
    My addiction
    And my anti-drug
    Now you are poison
    And my cigarette is my savior

    Submitted on 2006-01-30 14:08:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OOOH i love this. very descriptive, very good imagery. i can imagine you sitting there and everything. i may add this to my favorites.

    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by star_on_fire22 | [ Reply to This ]
      Great poem. Very cool how you used the cigarette. I think it was supposed to be a metaphor for something? I hope so, if not, correct me:) Nice job, this is definitly one of the better poems i've read so far.
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      Wait... Who was your addiction? What happend? Why did you write about this? Just decided it would be rather cool to write about smoking? Or did you smoke at one time?
    It is a good poem just I didn't understand it kind of.
    P.S.: Don't give up it may just be me...
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]

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