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    dots Submission Name: Trappeddots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 14
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 834
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 128



    Description:
       For my son, Chad, 11 who is struggling with growing up. Like a lot of you here, he's young but wise...I told him he just suffers now because he's an old spirit in a kid's body!!


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    dotsTrappeddots
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    Old Soul
    in little
    man's
    body...
    new path
    in infinite
    one's
    mind...




    Submitted on 2004-04-29 13:28:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmm. the possibilities of our children are infinite, aren't they. it kinda makes you reflect on your childhood(as the reader). wisdom is great, but nothing without happiness, hence one my many problems both now and as a youth. Sure Chad will pull through, take care.
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Short but perfect I wouldn't change a thing.
    sometimes a few words can have more power then a 1000 page novel. good job
    | Posted on 2004-04-29 00:00:00 | by Broken Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...I love the way you decribe your son's mind being older in a younger man's body. My mother says the same kind of things about me. That mentally I'm too old but physically I look and act like a five year old. Anyways I liked the flow of this piece and the structure too....good work
    ~Jaime Lee Pachétte~
    | Posted on 2004-04-29 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really nice. I love the conciseness of it. I'm not sure you need the ellipses. My mom and I were talking about how I never was a child the other day. The weird thing is that I look 15 at 28.
    | Posted on 2004-04-29 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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