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    dots Submission Name: Awake In Me Dreamdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 534
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 215



    Description:
       "A deep man believes ~...Soul's avowal of its large relations, and that climate, century, remote natures, as well as near, are part of "ITS" biography.

    Chemistry takes to pieces, but "IT" does not construct. Alchemy which sought to transmute one element into another, to prolong life, to arm with power, - that was in the right direction. All our science lacks a human side. The tendant is more than the house....Man is a fagot of thunderbolts" Emerson on Beauty

    Just a simple expression of being sometimes just is & "IT" doesn't need to be more than that.

    Happy Week ES!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    tif


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    dotsAwake In Me Dreamdots
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    Awake In Me Dream
    As I relax
    supported by your mountains///
    sheltered in your valleys ( )
    adrift in your seas ~~~
    S
    O
    U
    Life

    Between us




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    ||| Comments |||
      hey hows things thanx for your comment once again reading your discription and then your post you leave me in deep thought
    thats a good thing
    i believe some of us listen to our souls talk you seem to have the gift such as i
    well done and hope all is good with you and yours

    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Tiff,

    This one comes through quite clearly, everything around us is the carrier of the soul's language, sometimes artists are given the chance to translate what cannot be conveyed in words.

    and then there is he land of poets, hehe
    nice work, thanks for sharing,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      ummm...I can sense feeling here, but there are not enough words for me to feel it. It could be more indepth. I suggest you add more to it if possible. If you decide to...cool, if not...cool as well. it's a cute poem either way.
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by night_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      short and sweet, but it had a lot of meaning. it's like u compared this person to ur world. the SOUL part was pretty cool too.
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Maggie, very sweet, romantic and quite poignant as well. All I can say is that whoever this was written for, must be one hell of a person.. and very lucky too !

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      You know something
    I really like how you structure your poems
    Origanality is important
    I try to use my own style with my writes
    This write is deep and if you really read it slowly and carefully it captures a mind of its own
    Very Well Done
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty cool, I liked it a lot. Your poem's structure, that was pretty awesome, especially the sOUL part and then filling in the 'L' with life. Pretty clever. Keep on writing!
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it a lot. keep up the great work. i really hope to read more by you soon. i like how you wrote SOUL. it was cool.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiff- I like this. The whole piece is a metaphor, and I so do like metaphors. As far as it's meaning... well I don't think I am smart enuff to figgar it out, gotta ask Cleo. Gawd! Hope she don't make me ... you know... again, a 43 year old newly wed man can't hang like he did 20+ years ago. Oh well nuff with my whining, ain't it horrible?

    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      This was so sweet and romantic. Simple and brief, but had a very strong and powerful meaning. I loved the way you sturctured this. It brighten my day. Great flow and imagery. Great job.


    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this and the way you brought it out. Neat symbols for moutains/valleys/seas.
    I read this as two different meanings.. One is the love of a soulmate. The other is awakening the dreams within and connecting with your inner self.. your soul. I like both ways. Very nice!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way soul leads to life and life is between us....
    Very powerful..
    your words comand attention.

    You keep writing and I will keep reading..

    Sorry I am short on time...
    Keep lovin and livin life
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by smalltown | [ Reply to This ]


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