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    dots Submission Name: Lover and Friendsdots
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    Author: Qutedia7
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 54/70/31
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 220
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 357



    Description:
       Love poem of course. Plz comment. Thanx!


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    dotsLover and Friendsdots
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    I love you so much, your are my friend; although you may not know it; I will love you until the end of time. Although we are only friends, people see us more. When we are together my heart soars. All the girls want you because they think you fly. I pray we stay friends and maybe even more. I just don't want to lose you because I heart would be toren.




    Submitted on 2006-01-30 18:46:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow, that was unique. Its sounds like the poems you would write while your looking at the person in the poem (or the person I look at when i'm looking at them.) i , personally, don't think it was childish, i think it has a meaning, like you had to let out your felings and you let it out in that poem. Even though it was a bit short, it told a lot.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      A few typos/mistakes: because I heart would be tore = because my heart would be torn
    intil = until
    haert = heart
    your my friend = you're my friend
    [sorry they're not in order]
    Second, this line: Although we are only friends, people see us more
    I'm not exactly sure what you mean by it... people see us as more? Perhaps clear that up.
    Otherwise... it's... not cliché, but in a way innocent and slightly childish, though don't take that as an insult. It's an observation that is neither good nor bad ^_^ overall, I thought it was cute and I liked it. ~Cora
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]



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