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    dots Submission Name: Son of the Damned 'Part 3'dots
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    Author: Toxic_Rayne
    ASL Info:    16/f/a happier place
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 1313/1094/162
    Words: 387
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 288
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    Description:
       This is the third adittion to "Son of the Damned" series. Hope you like the form of it.


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    dotsSon of the Damned 'Part 3'dots
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    Anger...
    Annoyance
    Pulsing through his veins
    Ignorance
    Stranger...
    Than even her belligerent pain
    Nothing...
    Seems
    To matter to him anymore
    Useless
    Feelings...
    He's shutting and locking doors
    Senseless...
    Souls
    They corrupt everyone he meets
    Bloody
    Beaten...
    He leaves them alying on the streets
    Suicidal...
    Homicides
    Led by the bloodstained knife
    Isanity
    Calamity...
    What's the point to this life......?

    Living off the knife
    Surviving from his fists
    Bullet holes
    Slit wrists
    Welcome to his life
    Hating to love
    And...
    Loving to hate
    Never giving up his life
    To the twisted hands of fate
    A train wreck
    Where the survivors were all too late
    Shaking with venom and rage
    Life's nothing but a play
    And he thirsts for center stage

    Mother's panging the cell phone line...
    Again
    Why bother to answer?
    She never bothered to care
    Wound up in her depression
    Shooting him toxic glares
    This was how she showed her love
    To her one and only son
    Whom she gave up for adoption
    When he was only three
    Through this thick purple haze
    His eyes cannot see
    What began as a dare
    Became an addiction
    Escaping police chases
    Became his one true conviction
    Hating today
    Despising the morrow
    Pathetic disgraces for human beings
    Drowning in their own sorrow

    Toxic Hatred; enough to freeze over Hell
    No one ever died for his sins
    Not as far as he can tell

    A world where nothing else mattered
    But being a five year old boy
    Foster father leaving him bruised and battered

    Yet, that was 12 years ago
    They all adore him but
    Of his past he'll never let them know

    They hold him up only to break him down
    Acting sympathetic; acting as if they care
    They'd give him a death cursed crown

    IF THEY HAD THE CHANCE...

    Born into darkness, never to find light
    Born a "blind man", never to see the sight

    THEY'D SLIT HIS THROAT WITH A LANCE...

    Because no one ever bothered; no one cares
    Walking down the street, he feels their glares

    Life's a calamity, as far as he can see

    Rich posers, diamond rings, a superstar sings

    Not the life for him, to much strife for him

    No love, without a friend, this life never seems to

    End...




    Submitted on 2006-01-30 18:50:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i never read the first two 'son of the damned' poems. really thorough, really in depth. really cool. his story is the story of basically every serial killer, abandoned young, addicted young.

    Johnny 5
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Johnny 5 | [ Reply to This ]
      a much needed addition to son of the danmed
    it adds light where he has none so illuminates your point of life being pointless but never ending
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by Animus Custodis | [ Reply to This ]
      that's what i'm talking about! this was so cool. the first stanza seemed kinda like a slowed down introduction. i can see this being a song. and after the first stanza it just seemd to explode. this whole thing was amazing. poor kid. it seems like u pick the worst life possible for a person to have and put it down on paper.
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty good except the start was a little choppy and off for a little but you certainly made up for it...as always good imagry, good job at stealing song lines lols. I liked the series alot except I'm not sure about ur ending with this one...it seemes a little meladramatic...lol good one overall tho.
    peace
    ~Silent~
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a very enthralling piece that was fueled by emotion - it was believable and well written.
    This has deeper messages too I believe & I'll be looking forward to the next installment!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      That is amazing. The overall rhythm it has to it just adds to the clever use of words. Only one line/paragraph/stanza I dislike -

    Yet, that was 12 years ago
    They all adore him but
    Of his past he'll never let them know

    I don't think it has the same feel to it as the other stanza's, seems a little more forced. Overall I think it's very good however.
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by ZXDPrince | [ Reply to This ]
      I LOVE IT u have to keep this up this is just brillant I love these two series and can't wait for them to clash it is oging to be great I lvoe the line

    Living off the knife
    Surviving from his fists
    Bullet holes
    Slit wrists


    the flow and impact of that line was just amazing this is magniicent I hope u get the othe rparts written soon can't wait for the next installment untl then later days

    =Logan=
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]



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