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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 569
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    ok now listen
    see doctor shanx is on a mission
    to tell what is wrong with you and crush the oppisition
    I'm more of a witch doctor than a physician
    cause my practices ar fatal just to get rid'a'you
    like smothering your face for an hour or two
    avoid that dude with the crown tattoo
    he's the type to slaughter the whole slew
    ain't even think about it that's just what I do
    don't say it ain't bitcht because you know it to be true
    fuck you and yo' momma, your have been subdued
    bitch don't argue that, watch your tongue
    any knowledge that you have might go unsung
    you know we be victorious, you know we've won
    this the end mother fucka, I'll see you next week
    so go and pop some pills, and get somethin' to eat
    this was the intorduction, next I'll talk about petifiles
    I know everybody interested cause damn I'm seein many smiles
    deuce,
    the doc has spoken




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      ok now listen
    see doctor shanx is on a mission
    to tell what is wrong with you and crush the oppisition
    I'm more of a witch doctor than a physician

    u and chaz both spell like crap. i don't care though. i just like messing with y'all about it. this was good. it started off great but the first three lines were a level above the rest of the rap. if u could've kept it up, this would've been amazing
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      it sounds more like a rap than a poem. other than the miss spelling s and stuff it sounds pretty good though. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by sword stalker | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is oretty shabby. the rythem flow is great but the style is kinda off. YOU have great potential. keep writing,

    always
    dark romeos girl
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by DrkRomeo_sGirl | [ Reply to This ]


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