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Submission Name: Dancing dots

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Author:	jessie thomas
ASL Info:	17/F/Alabama
Elite Ratio:	4.15 - 297/333/77
Words:	79

Class/Type:	Poetry/Romance
Total Views:	311
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	618

Description:
I wrote this in English class as we were reading Romeo and Juliet, so I suppose that accounts for the wording and such. But yes..I wrote it about dancing in Raivn's living room with Chris last Friday night. It was wonderful...

Dancing

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Ah! Wonderful boy!
Taketh my hand,
We'll dance!

Fingers in-twined,
With no preset steps.

I know not the time,
And I know not the world!

I doth only know,
Your arms.

Protected form evil,
Protected form harm!
With fingers in twined,
We dance.

The song doth change,
But our movements shall not!
Because all that matters,
Is we're together.

Now hours hath passed,
And still we dance!
Fingers in-twined,
With no preset steps.

Submitted on 2006-01-30 21:00:45 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I remember when you first let me read this, It was as beautiful then too in your handwriting. I loved every second of that night and every time we dance. We need to dance now! :P Or we can wait for the prom. Heh heh.
| Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by Herrick | [ Reply to This ]
  shake, shake, shake...shake, shake, shake... Shake your... nevermind. I'm bored. I done commented on this poem. But I like this 'un. What!? You want some? Bring it on biznatch! I'm waiting. You should do some more dancing...We need a prom song...
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't know that you'll want to hear this, but its cute! It's so light and free, even with it's heavy worded ways. I really like this.
| Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by faln_angl | [ Reply to This ]
  The old fashioned speech of this poem allows it to come alive for me. Great write. I can see that you like someone a lot or want to like someone a lot. Good luck.
| Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, I am amused. Glad you had such a wonderful time, I was hungry. All in all, was it worth it? I sure hope so, I feel terribly responsible. Well, I put that pink stuff in my hair. It's crazy. I like this poem. It's different, and different is good...
| Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
  Get poem, Shakespeare can give alot of real good inspiration in writing, at least it is to me, i just dont post my shakespearian writings. I also like your use of dance as a topic, dancing is very good in that it can have many meanings, metaphor and literal. Overall great job.

~Kane~
| Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]

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