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You... Me.

Author: RyukiTZR
ASL Info:    14/F/-
Elite Ratio:    3.94 - 133 /130 /44
Words: 63
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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This is something totally random. Any critic is welcome...

You... Me.

I love doing homework.
Cause... to hell with it.
That's what I so can't stand.
You... me.

Sneaky mean words behind my back.
I turn around,
I'd fall into a trap.
That's what I hate.
You... me.

All alone in the bathroom,
Love burning heat of
The ice that's pounding,
Every tile that's glaring at me.
I see you... me.

Submitted on 2006-01-31 05:33:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was kinda weird. but i thought it was kinda...sweet. it seemed so laid back and not simple but not too complicated either. just something light for u to read and enjoy
| Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  this was really good i enjoyed word for word to the end
well put together word for word very nice and well done

| Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  yeah this was a very short but sweet poem. i liked it. i really didnt fully understand it. but i did like hiw the rhyming was it was good
| Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Tash | [ Reply to This ]
  sweet. short and neat. im rhyming..i dont even do that in most of my poems. haha. this is good. its my kind of thing.. some people might not get it, but its good.
| Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

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