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    dots Submission Name: Let Me Crydots
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    Author: Lavender
    ASL Info:    20/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 101/125/59
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 739
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    dotsLet Me Crydots
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    Won't you let me cry
    Cry my eyes out
    Let the tears flow
    The tears of pain
    Pain down my cheeks
    Burning like hot acid on my face
    Dripping like blood onto the ground
    Why make me hold it back
    When I want to let it all go
    When I want to feel emotion
    You won't let me cry
    So why don't I
    Why won't I let me cry




    Submitted on 2006-01-31 08:55:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was really good i enjoyed word for word to the end
    well put together word for word very nice and well done

    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is real poetry to me. You can feel the emotion. There is conflict. At first someone is stopping you from crying and its like you realize that it was you. There is also imagery, allowing the reader to create a visual. very good
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Tempting | [ Reply to This ]


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