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    dots Submission Name: Le Petite Mortedots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       Written a long time ago. I was inspired by a scene from that movie Bride of Chucky, where the guy tells someone that the French call an orgasm Le Petite Morte, meaning, "The Little Death."

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    dotsLe Petite Mortedots

    The smoke of incense clouds the air
    Almost too heavy to breathe.
    Shadows flicker in the night.
    Your hand rests upon my sleeve.
    I feel your breath against my neck.
    I feel the touch of your face.
    As you nibble on my ear
    I crave the warmth of your embrace.
    Caresses and kisses will never be enough
    To quell this thirst inside
    Only your total surrender will do
    For my hunger will never subside.
    I flick my tongue across your lips
    To get a little taste
    Take my hand and join with me
    We'll swiftly leave this place.
    As I slowly lead you to my lair
    Bathed in silk and candlelight
    I softly whisper in your ear
    Let's die a little tonight.

    Submitted on 2006-01-31 11:19:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    beautifully amazingly sexy
    i loved it!

    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... la petite mort is the philosophical name given to orgasms, and so the poem inquires the persona's beloved to have sex. The title was captivating leaving its "original" significance aside.

    The poem is eloquently written, with magnificent diction. At no point do you become vulgar in your desires, but you keep a degree of elegance.

    This is cleverly written with beautiful imagery. If I should recommend one thing, though, is to make a more comprehensible structure.

    Well done.
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by HansRik | [ Reply to This ]
      This was relly good. Did you watch Bride of Chucky the other night on TV?? I did, we may have been watching it at the same time...creepy creepy eh...so you have to come see me because I demand it...homecoming is Saturday at our school...starts at 4, don't know if I am going.
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah. Wonderful. I loved the lines,
    'Take my hand and join with me
    We'll swiftly leave this place.
    As I slowly lead you to my lair
    Bathed in silk and candlelight
    I softly whisper in your ear
    Let's die a little tonight.'

    Really it was just a wonderfully clever poem. The rhyme scheme was wonderful.
    I don't have a lot to say about this...it was wonderful. I loved it.
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this is good. the title was different. what does it mean? i love how you said lets die a little tonight.. keep up the awesome work.
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]

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