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    dots Submission Name: WHO'S GONNA CRY OUT?dots
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    Author: xtremegentleman
    ASL Info:    22/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 595/778/82
    Words: 487
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Many people complain about what goes on in our nation and our communities. Many people don't care. My question is who's gonna pray about it? Who's gonna cry out to God for these people who don't know enough to cry out for themselves?


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    dotsWHO'S GONNA CRY OUT?dots
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    Look at the plight of our community...something is wrong
    Our babies are making babies while our fathers are gone
    No one bothers to care! Can't you see our despair
    The youth are begging us for knowledge but we have none to share

    There...it's been said, but nothing is done
    When we keep blaming the blameless how can the battle be won?
    "Oh, it's the white man's fault!" We must be out of our minds
    The biggest form of racism is "Black on Black Crime"

    We've destroyed our surroundings by selling our souls
    Casting votes for the devil when we visit the polls
    Lord knows there's a problem...but can our people be saved
    Before we're wiped off the map by the HIV AIDS?

    We've gotta pray...our morals have reached an all time low
    Symbols of sex are marketed everywhere that we go
    Our boys have chosen drug dealing as their careers
    And our girls are being raped by their close relatives

    How can we live on and go on and turn our heads
    And close our eyes to the images our children are fed
    Rap music uses it's glamour to confuse us
    And our youth are using it...we let 'em...we're losing it

    Moving away from principles that God put in place
    Affirmative action is not the answer, God uses FAITH
    Spare the rod, spoil the child--this is one we should weigh
    But we choose to spoil the child over spoiling it's day

    You Christians are cowards, powerless, weak!
    Stop hiding inside your homes and take a walk on the streets
    King's dream has gone to sleep...our pastors won't teach
    Trading soft sermons for dollars while our souls are decieved

    Who's gonna cry out when that little girl hurts
    Ashamed to tell the world that her father is her first
    Who's gonna gcry out for the hopeless dope fiends
    Whose dreams are pipe dreams in the pipes that they steam

    Who's gonna cry out for that young man in pain
    Who just hasn't been the same since his dad went away
    Who's gonna cry out for that girl who got played
    Over and over by sorry men and then turned gay

    Who's gonna cry out for the kids with terrible fates
    Innocent souls born with the HIV AIDS
    Who's gonna cry out for that man in a shell
    Got him some time and then he got raped in his cell

    Will you cry out for this nation of ours
    Flooded with sin from years of immorality's showers
    Will you cry out for the black community
    Got drugs! Got violence! But we lack unity

    We all complain and are quick to point the blame
    It's not the president it's the residents that cause the pain
    But for those who know no better and know no way out
    Where's the answer? Where's the prayer? Who's gonna cry out?




    Submitted on 2006-01-31 16:14:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      But we choose to spoil the child over spoiling it's day...

    Guilty...

    and close our eyes to the images our children are fed...

    Guilty...

    thank you... I needed that kick in the pants

    That's truly gotta be the most honest, heartfelt, genuine peice I've read yet. It made me take a serious look at myself. You hit on so many issues that are just blindly ignored and did it all with a serious flow. I'm in awe!
    | Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by kiddo13 | [ Reply to This ]
      Look at the plight of our community...something is wrong
    Our babies are making babies while our fathers are gone
    No one bothers to care! Can't you see our despair
    The youth are begging us for knowledge but we have none to share

    "Oh, it's the white man's fault!" We must be out of our minds
    The biggest form of racism is "Black on Black Crime"

    We've destroyed our surroundings by selling our souls
    Casting votes for the devil when we visit the polls

    Moving away from principles that God put in place
    Affirmative action is not the answer, God uses FAITH

    these are all the lines that i think stood out in this amazing piece of work. u pretty muched summed up our fu cked up society in one flow. pretty damn good. i don't know why people don't cry out. i think it's that we're too busy trying to improve our own situations or we're so worried about our own lives that we simply forget about or ignore the lives of others. or maybe this heartless ass society has affected us in a way that we can't explain. we grew up with all of this going on so it's commonplace now. we see it as just another variable in the huge equation of life that we all factor into.
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I can see why I'm seeing this on so many peeps fav list on their page...Damn! This was said more than any one poem ever could. you stood up for victims, showed us our accountibility, and told us to stop talking but take action. And I'm sure there is stuff I missed. Now this will be on my fav list as well. This was beyond excellent writing. Bravo!

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn Straight!

    Every day when my husband watches the news, I get more and more scared of the world my daughters are growing up in. I look at how the kids of today are behaving and realize that that's what my girls are going to have to choose from when they get old enough to get married. I am raising my girls with the now old fashioned values of respect, consideration, empathy and consequence of action. They're so screwed.
    I heard once that the greatest sin is the inaction of good men, and I believe it's absolutely true. Fantastic write, X.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that most people are scared to call out. Most are scared to help. And most of all...they are intimidated.

    People don't realize that it all starts with one person. So much power is held in one heart...and one mind. If more then one mind collaborated...I think that a lot of these problems wouldn't exist.

    At one point in time people cared so much more about one another...and about what we have been given. It wasn't about money and greed and power. It was all about the love of another.

    I think that this was wonderfully done. Even surpassed something I could have written! That says a lot! LOL

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      AMEN BRIAN!
    There was so much stuff in here and the way you kept it flowing was amazing!

    But we choose to spoil the child over spoiling it's day

    I think thats a big part of the problem...no one wants to be a parent to a child...they'd rather be a friend...there are few people that know how to be both. I agree with everything you say in this write and find it to be something that all should read. Yes, its not just the president but the residents as well. Brilliant write!
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...this is by far the strongest, most moving and thought provoking piece you have posted to date...


    I'm seriously at a lost for words...and so I will just give this the honor it is due...
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]


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