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    dots Submission Name: Three Questionsdots
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    Author: KimmyMim
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 223/303/117
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Rant/Comedy
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       Twenty three years married...almost twenty-four. Perhaps this is ADHD...on both sides??? I don't know...but some times it makes me totally crazy and I can't find an end...to my sentence! LOL!

    (Oh...the picture is compliments of the "Shoe Tree" in Nevada...apparently people have been throwing their pairs of shoes on it since the early 80's! LOL!)


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    dotsThree Questionsdots
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    Help me understand
    why a sweet someone,
    not everyone's someone,
    would spend sixty hours
    of their waking life
    during the week,
    working diligently
    for the wealth
    of a pathetic,
    self-centered
    business man,
    only to take home
    forty hours of pay,
    and then spend
    their entire weekend
    catching up
    on their own self,
    rather than
    family affairs?

    Help me comprehend
    why this sweet someone,
    not everyone's someone,
    would feel the need
    to drop their life
    to run to Home Depot
    to buy a stupid screw
    that was missing
    from the box
    when they were trying
    to attach a new
    door knob
    that really
    wasn't necessary
    to change
    in the first place?

    Help me to appreciate
    why, without warning,
    this sweet person,
    not all persons,
    would suddenly
    feel the urge
    to drive a bull dozer
    into the side
    of their property,
    and spend the next
    four years building
    a beautiful
    retaining rock wall
    inside the hole
    with the intent
    to contain either
    one, or both,
    of the two pools
    that were collected
    three years ago,
    from who-knows where,
    that are now in pieces
    and are still sitting
    scattered somewhere
    around one of the two sheds
    that are overflowing
    with things other
    than what they were
    meant to contain?

    And yet...
    I love him...




    Submitted on 2006-01-31 16:44:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I Agree with Lorna
    This write had me in stitches as well
    The added image of the picture you used incorporated with this write really sets ones mind in motion
    Excellently written
    Beautiful work my friend!
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Because that "sweet person" thinks he and his family will feel better if he does that...

    The poem was beautiful, yet a bit abrupt. I have the feeling that this (and a number of other poems of yours) should have been short prose, instead. They have everything: a good subject, good imagery, they captivate, yet they feel so abrupt for poetry... Do try short prose once!
    | Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by Kalyiel | [ Reply to This ]
      and from those questions, god did make the word IDIOT...lol...i feel like i'm outta breath reading that, but it was worth it...now i need to go find a paper bag to breathe in before i pass the hell out.
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      lol.. I love it!.. I sooo agree with the first stanza which is why I quit.. lol it ticked me off that I was selling my family for the small amount of money that I was making.. It just didn't balance right on my scale.. so I looked at hubby and said can I have my old job back, (pout pout)... great point on all of the stanza's I have a poem called Why? didn't go into the detail that you did soo eloquently here but just another one of those sit back and wonder poems,,:) Great Write..
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by rosered | [ Reply to This ]
      You've described my father. When I was ten years old, we moved to a new house. My father decided to build a very elaborate addition. I'm turning 30 this year. My father is turning 60. He's still not "done". We're suggesting habitat for humanity. You're piece is funny...I hear the angst and the love.
    The form reads as narrative with a twist. I like it.
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by marysunshine | [ Reply to This ]
      Ohhh! hahahahahhahahahaaaa! I gotta tell you, this made me laugh, and not just smile but friggin laugh out loud! This is a riot! I can so understand what you are saying here! I really honestly think it is a man thing! It doesnt make any sense to us, but makes perfect sense to them. I love the part about the door knob hee hee! Too funny! Men have this way of making you stop and think that you are going insane, that you seem to lack the understanding of rational thinking, but it is just that man/woman brain barrier thingy! haha! They dont get us and we dont get them! Like I have always said, God has a sense of humor, he made man and woman and then made them attracted to each other! haha! But I love the ending...despite all the insanity, you love him. Yup, I hear ya! I love mine too, but sometimes I wonder why! haha! Really amusing poem. Thanks for sharing it made me laugh! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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