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    dots Submission Name: Betweendots

    Author: Raven_s Miser
    ASL Info:    16-female- wap
    Elite Ratio:    4.64 - 68/54/18
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       ive been gone a bit but this piece kinda sucks its in so structure its justa random thought


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    I hear nothing... I see only two lines.
    One of yellow .....One of white.
    Everything falls between them and drifts quickly behind
    Never leaving the sight of the color base lines.

    Thoughts that roll and reflect upon the dreams that come alive with the night, and never banish without the closing of your eyes and a brief flight from real life.

    To escape the world of sins and lost despairs.
    They fall to earth and here they stay to begin our morning night and days.

    They may be Yellow centered and alined
    They may White on the edge and isolated

    But in the reality there is only silence that lingers between the lines with thoughs and expectations that keep on flowing as we follow the road that leads us where we go but in all of it we must be guided between the 2 based lines

    Submitted on 2006-01-31 18:26:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey Raven_s Miser,
    This is very powerful, the way you used Yellow and WHite was great. At first the beginning was powerful, but then the next few lines kept that up. Finally after getting to the following line, I became a little confused:

    "Thoughts that roll and reflect upon the dreams that come alive with the night, and never banish without the closing of your eyes and a brief flight from real life."

    I am not really sure what that means, if you could explain it that would be great. Well, until I do understand it I am not too sure if it belongs in this piece of work.
    I applaud your work because it did make me think and left me wanting more. That is good, your wirting is enjoyable. I hope to hear more. Keep Writing!
    ~much love~
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Imaginth | [ Reply to This ]

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