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    dots Submission Name: Rumors and Raindots

    Author: haileebobailee
    ASL Info:    18/F/NV
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 30/41/15
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsRumors and Raindots

    I saw you walking in the rain

    that day in early March.

    You didnít see me.

    Carolina blue converse and a

    blank stare.

    I remembered our road trip

    to San Francisco Bay.

    The pier and the Giants.

    Lobster tails and clam chowder

    at Lisaís Bar and Grill.

    Winter snowboarding

    and broken arms.

    A bad hair cut and blue hair dye.

    Too many colds and

    too much cough medicine.

    Then we fell away from each other.


    A bitter breakup

    and rumors.

    Lies and a

    beautiful blonde.

    You said you were sorry

    I didnít believe you.

    An empty vodka bottle

    and a minute long phone call

    was our end.

    So now as you

    walk in the rain

    I remember those times

    and I wonder why

    you act like you donít see

    me anymore.

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      "A lost love in a time past, but some good memories to last. An experiance we all can share, understood by hearts that care. A truly warm write, and I can identify...Mugs-
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this alot...is actually how i feel now...me and gf just ended after a long time...and she acts like she doesn't see me ne more...so i think this is not too emotional and it really good...
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by withblindedeyez | [ Reply to This ]
      I must disagree, I don't think there is such a thing as a poem with too much emotion! The rawness of this poem is held captive by it's words, and this is a beautiful, brilliant write.
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by faln_angl | [ Reply to This ]
      Um... seems to me this almost had too much emotion for a post. Sometimes these poems are best kept to yourself when others won't understand the story behind them. But ne way, good work!
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with xsweetanglekiss. the emotion in this is very well hidden. it seems like u are just recording thoughts and memories in a catalog or something. but if u look close u can see the love u have for this person while u are writing and u can also feel the pain that he caused. damn good write
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading this and it struck a chord with me as i've been blanked again and again and it hurts. you put a lot of emotion into this and that came across. great piece i like it a lot
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one of those poems where it has so much emotion behind it, yet it is so suttle when you read it. It has alot of power, and it takes alot to be able to write a piece that stands out in that way! I admire your writing and I wish you to keep it going!
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by xsweetangelkiss | [ Reply to This ]

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