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Masters Of Our Own Fate


Author: Roberto Santos
ASL Info:    18/Male/India
Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 118 /159 /75
Words: 124
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I wrote this when I was reflecting on the state of mankind. It is borne out of a deep disgust at the plight of man.


Masters Of Our Own Fate


Listen to the wails of the anguished
Their cry resembles one from within
Pay heed to the appeals of the suffering
How long can you ignore the din?

We seek the answers to many questions
We try to discover the reason for our plight
But this pain will be indefinitely prolonged
If with ourselves we continue to fight.

There is no logic behind this condition
We should not be destroying our own kind
But the reason for this complete madness
I just do not seem able to find.

It doesn’t help to appeal to the Almighty
When we are masters of our own fate
We can no longer appeal to a higher power
Our pleas come a little too late.




Submitted on 2006-02-01 09:51:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  simply amazing. this was a well put plea to humanity as a whole to get up off of their asses and make a damn change for once. yeah i think this write is flawless. and it is definitely going on my fave list.
| Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  simply amazing. this was a well put plea to humanity as a whole to get up off of their asses and make a damn change for once. yeah i think this write is flawless. and it is definitely going on my fave list.
| Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, i think this is very very fantastic. Great rhyme scheme, great point, great idea overall. Very good, i cant really think of anything to change, keep on writing.
P.S. This is going in my favorites.

~Kane~
| Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
  interesting... good rhyming scheme. I like the overall work and I don't see much you could change; improvement wise. It obviously has feeling, though personally I don't feel it. But that's just me...very good write...
| Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by night_angel | [ Reply to This ]


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