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Waiting For The Moment


Author: Saaber
ASL Info:    20/m/BD
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 101 /99 /26
Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This must be the crappiest I have written... But like the MAJORITY of my poems, it's true, and I USED TO feel this way.


Waiting For The Moment



From the day that I first saw you,
On your face I see a gleam,
Remembering it everyday since then
Every night about you I dream.
Very rarely I cannot remember all your expressions, but
Eventually I remember how you feign or look,
Reminding me that I want you,
May it be by hook or crook.
Interesting is the fact that I haven't already claimed you as mine,
Not to worry though, for when I have done just that,
Everyone will think that what I've done is just fine!




Submitted on 2006-02-01 10:28:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This sounds like a LoVe poem....SaAber.... well, anyways, I liked it it was a beautiful poem. Keep it up!


, Jessica
| Posted on 2006-05-14 00:00:00 | by jslbabygirl101 | [ Reply to This ]
  din understand the last 3 lines.
overall impression: gud rite, but u've written much better.

keep it up
| Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really deep
I believe you are speaking of that simple word called Love and how it can easily be manipulated
I feel you are a kind hearted person deep inside just a little afraid to let others in
Dont be afraid thou
like I said
I can see your Heart is in the right place
I dont believe you can purposely hurt anyone
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I wouldn't say it's crappy...call it a work in progress. Try changing it up a little, like
'Very rarely I cannot remember all your expressions, but
Eventually I remember how you feign or look,'
can be
'At times your face in my mind fades,
but eventually I'll rmember how you looked that day.'
| Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by faln_angl | [ Reply to This ]
  ummm... interesting phrasing... your poem has a good ryme scheme and lots of narration. I like this poem and I bet my friends would also. I hope you don't mind if I tell them of it... and everything.
| Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by night_angel | [ Reply to This ]


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