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Dhaka


Author: Saaber
ASL Info:    20/m/BD
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 101 /99 /26
Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
Total Views: 1045
Average Vote:    4.0000
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This is about my gangsta hometown Dhaka. Load shedding is the time when there is no electricity in a particular area. This is an unfinished poem... Somehow most of my poems are unfinished nowadays...


Dhaka



Slow, funny mode of travel
Through streets broken or overfilled gravel;
Load shedding at least a week once-
The time in the night when the oil lamp burns;
Robbers and murderers operate during the night,
Even though there are hijackings and kidnappings under daylight.
People's houses ranging from under a tree to a huge mansion,
Clothes being dirty, torn rags to pieces of the latest fashion.




Submitted on 2006-02-01 10:50:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Never been to Dhaka. Might try. Sounds like Karachi. It's a nice and short piece. Very descriptive. Might be nicer if it was longer. Good write.

Soph
| Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by Soph | [ Reply to This ]
  haha....i so know what u are talking about pal...maybe u can continue the poem by adding the fun we had in our " gangsta hometown Dhaka".
why hasn't anybody commented on this piece i dunno (racism? ignorance?)
| Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
  i like hthis piece alot. it biugs that no one has commented. i hope to read more by you soon this is a great piece. keep posting.
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tina
| Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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