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    dots Submission Name: Make Your Own Pathdots
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    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 957
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1206



    Description:
       just a song


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    dotsMake Your Own Pathdots
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    Even though you walked…
    The path of righteousness
    Tell my why, you were left behind
    Tell me why they cast you aside
    Left lying here to die….

    Sever the ties,
    Break these bonds
    All is lost tonight…

    Now you’re falling down
    6 feet beneath the ground
    Tell me was it all worthwhile
    Cuz in the end you found….

    Now sweat drips in your eyes
    Life bound in chains, deprived
    Of this life, without decaying inside….
    One strand of light, in a dark sky
    Will burn out and eventually die…

    Sever the ties…
    Break these bonds….
    All is lost tonight…

    Now you’re falling down
    6 feet beneath the ground
    Tell me was it all worthwhile
    Cuz in the end you found…

    You can’t time back time…
    There’s only one fate made for you….
    There’s no turning back….

    You’re running with closed eyes….
    Following the same mistakes……….
    Don’t walk in the same path,
    Find your own way through….

    Sever the ties…
    Break these bonds….
    All is lost tonight…




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      I liek the lyrics. It's dark and full of emotion, as if your trying to get the message across to take hold of your life and make it your own. Don't let others take you down, stand up for yourself for you only get to live once. Stay strong through everything and in the end you'll come out on top. That is the message this poem gave me. Wonderful job.
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked these lyrics and it could be interpreted a couple different ways - for me I took the positive message to take control and responsibility for your life and actions.
    Good!
    It also seemed like it had some religious connotation and the 6's pattern.
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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