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    dots Submission Name: Wake The Fallendots
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    Author: LostInYerTears
    ASL Info:    14/F/Fl
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 85/86/32
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 204
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    dotsWake The Fallendots
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    *~*The Word "Yer"In Here Is Your......Tis Not spelled incorrectly*~*



    yer walking through the woods at night,
    with the moon above shinning bright,
    the trees sway in the night rain,
    it happened before now it's happening again,
    lightening flashes on the ground ahead,
    then a spell is heard waking the dead:
    wake the fallen rise tonight,
    fallen souls we shine so bright,
    forget the past attack the present,
    remember from whom you were sent,
    wake the dead let them rise,
    let them send a horride surprise,
    wake the fallen rise tonight,
    kill the living as the moon shines bright.....

    hearing the spell you run and hide,
    with stinging doupts shredding yer insides,
    you hear deadly moans and begin to cry,
    knowing tonights the night you'll die,
    they were sent to you by me,
    to cause you all pain and misery,
    they'll find you alone,
    and turn yer heart to brittle stone,
    seeking more then payback,
    wishing to take you to were you cant come back,
    burn for the rest of time,
    as you continue to look for a place to hide,
    then out of the dark filled air,
    a figure appears with grey hair,
    it reaches in and grabs yer heart,
    and tears yer limbs apart,
    when lightening flashes on the ground ahead,
    and you hear a spell waking the dead,
    go now run hide,
    or you'll spend eternity in time,




    Submitted on 2006-02-01 11:48:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This a great poem. I love how much imagery created, and how you described the images. It reminds me of a book I read a while ago. Can't remeber the name just now, it was a pretty good book. I'm rambling on again *sigh* nice work.
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by atonement | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was very interesting, it described things very well. As in grabbing your heart and tearing the limbs apart, I dont really want to imagine that right now, but I can see it. :D good job.
    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]



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