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    dots Submission Name: How It Feels To Love Youdots
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    Author: faln_angl
    ASL Info:    25/f/MN
    Elite Ratio:    4.66 - 99/96/17
    Words: 539
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 214
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1667



    Description:
       I wrote this on one of those sleepless nights.

    You know the kind of night that all you can think about is the one you love and can't be with......


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    dotsHow It Feels To Love Youdots
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    Every morning I stare
    to the East
    Waiting for the sunrise,
    trying to feel peace.
    My eyes glazed over,
    lack of sleep.
    Bloodshot from the
    crocodile tears I weep.
    My mind wanders
    thruout the day,
    Drifting off to a
    place far away.
    My heart aches,
    searching for love,
    Every moment is the the same
    as any other one.
    I try to eat, I try
    to write,
    I try to breathe,
    but something's not right.
    My mind is preoccupied
    with moving on,
    Yet my soul is torn,
    and my throat is raw.
    Everytime I cry for you,
    I yell out your name
    Since you left this hopeless town,
    things are not the same.
    My eyes see things differently,
    time is all but still,
    I daydream way too much
    to know what's truly real.
    Evening comes,
    the sun travels on,
    Bringing my happiness to
    someone else's dawn.
    The nights here are hard;
    cold, lonesome, and free.
    I give up all hope
    of ever falling asleep
    As I stare at the wall,
    wanting to fall,
    Instead I toss and turn
    restlessly,
    Trying to make sense
    of the nonsense that is me.




    Submitted on 2006-02-01 12:34:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is another write that I can relate to. People that I have cared about have gone away. It isn' t that I don't care now,but the pain went away and I realize that the separation was for the best. And I hope that you take the good out of what seems bad, and that it really symbolizes growth, even when we do not realize it. (I daydream so much I don't even know whats rea) or something like that is exactly what happens to me from time to time. Very interested in what you have to say.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by BrokenStream | [ Reply to This ]
      a little bit longer then what I usually stick around for...hmmm i think it have adult a.d.d *shrug* oh well...but i'm going to fav this one as well...for personal reasons...it speaks to me.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I again agree with UnspokenDreamer...that line is common in the sheet music of the walls of our heart and the walkings of our soul when weve loved and lost.Good I have to admitt.I liked it.Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      "Trying to make sense of the nonsense that is me" by far my favorite thing I have read all day. I can relate to that entirely, tossing and turning... excellent ending. The rhyme scheme was a bit weak, but you'llhave that, not all writing is written to be presentable, sometimes, (most often my writing) it is simply to get things out. Great job!

    Cheers
    Tom
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      I truely love this deep poem. I am for sure adding it to my fav's. I love the use of wording and rhyme. It flowed so wonderfuly. I love all the emotion put into it, you cna really see and feel the hurt your going through. I hope all is well for you and i wish you the best, remember to hang on and be strong, even when it seems all hope is lost, there will always be someone to help you through the hard times. Take care.
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this poem.I can't really say anything negative about it.Hmm...what to write...out of words...lol...sorry...It was great.Keep up the good writing.

    |+|Candace|+|
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]



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