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    dots Submission Name: Miss The Raindots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 625
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       I have no explanation. It's not about Tony. That's all I got...


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    dotsMiss The Raindots
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    A beautiful morning is dawning,
    The sun chasing the shadows of the night.
    The sky is that perfect pallet of colors
    There isn't a cloud in sight.
    The day promises to be cheerful and warm,
    The sun mocking any bit of pain
    Everyone rejoices at the blue sky,
    But I miss the rain.

    The sky is clear, and the birds break into song.
    I want the lightning and the thunder.
    I need a violent wind to toss the waves
    And threaten to pull me under.
    I crave the fierceness of a storm
    A downpour that soaks me to the bone
    I want trees to blow and branches to break
    I want a tragedy unlike any ever known.

    The birds cotinue to twitter
    And the flowers begin to bloom
    The sun chases away all the shadows,
    And attempts to dispell the gloom.
    My world is tumbling around my ears
    And the weather will not take the blame.
    The perfection magnifies my solitude,
    And god, I miss the rain.




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      I loved this also! To be perfectly honest...this piece reminded me of a grouchy old man who never wants anything good or happy to happen. I know that's not what it's about but that's the first thing that popped into my mind. lol. I'm actually very confused about what this is about. I've had a few different ideas about this so would you mind telling me? But I like the wording and the way it was written. It's fun using metaphors with your poem. It's amazing with what something could represent! I could think of many things. Were you talking about the weather or were you actually using metaphors? I could see how both would work.
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this a lot. I absoutly loved how you ended a few of the stanzas with 'I miss the rain.' And the very last line when you encorperated the word 'God'. I really got a sense of you longing there. I also like that this is not about Tony. A bit refreshing if you know what I mean. The flow in this poem was wonderful. It had a lot of good imagry. When you described how everything that happened when the rain stopped, the birds and the flowers, ect. I could see it all in my head. A medow where it is raining and they all of a sudden it stops, and the animals begin to creep out and the sun starts to shine and whites out all of the gloomy black clouds, and the the chipper little blue birds and robins flyabout and they are just singing away. And then oyu miss the rain. It is a very elegant poem and I like it a lot. Very good job, dear cousin.
    ...Apollonia
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      I truly think that this is one of the best poems that you have ever written...this poem right here speaks volumes about you, it really is awesome...I think that you are the coolest person n the world today and I need you cause, like I have already said granny is gone and I need you to comfort me.pwease.
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an incredible write
    My Friend I have a love affair with a good rain and then a good storm
    I feel the rain washes away all fears and negativitys and then deposits a sunshine to seal the good feeling we now have
    I truefully enjoyed this
    Great Write!
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome! This was a delight to read in many ways...metaphorically and...ummm...that other word that doesnt mean metaphorically, ya know?

    I get like that too towards the end of the summer. The birds and all that happy type sunshiny stuff is nice, but a good rain storm is just as nice too.

    Another very fine read from you. High five!
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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