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    dots Submission Name: Sorrydots
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    Author: nosferotu_gurl
    ASL Info:    16/female/wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 136/163/65
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 220
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 513



    Description:
       I dont know if this is permanent but its to a person who says they know yet confused.Your
    BLIND!!


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSorrydots
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    She stands in the shadows so alone
    but free from illusion she finds home.
    Cold is her world death is the fate
    she turns away no love but hate.
    Tired of waiting no more mabe's
    cause gone with the wind is this angel baby.
    Never turn back for all thats left
    is ashes and laughter of hope and dreams
    pain and unwanted love.
    I did love you
    More than the world and life itself
    But now I move on
    Clean of pasts shelf
    Sorry




    Submitted on 2006-02-01 14:59:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      yeah, ur rhyme scheme did kinda confuse me but i still liked this one a lot. i did the same thing with a girl though. i really liked her and she liked me. but i took forever to ask her out so she ended up with someone else. there's still hope though...me and this chick are together now.
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this and other than the small typo with 'maybe' it was great. i truly hope to read more by you soon. i know a lot of people will be able to relate.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good, poem. It flows nicely but I found some of the rhyme to be a bit off. I liek the emotion and deep meaning behind it. Always remember love is never completly lost. Even though we will love and lose love it's better then never loving or being loved at all.
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      first i was like - wow this is brilliant but then u stoped ryming and the words didnt really go really well. cool poem :) elva
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by elva | [ Reply to This ]



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